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The watch collector

00°That smile That smile could put the sun to shame Those eyes are brighter than amber, eveen when in shade Those words could mend a broken soul That laugh could bring to life, a dying hope For I fell in love with a work of art That watch collector that stole my heart

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Aishi Roy Choudhury

Date: 11/14/2023 7:16:00 AM

I loved how you used “a dying hope” as a resemblance to the fact that hope is always an exaggeration and it is always something disappointing, and so Hope was a feeling to be killed in a cold heart. It was awesome! Keep it up! I loved it <333

Malem Luwang
Date: 11/14/2023 7:29:00 AM

Thank you so much. I am glad you liked my poem

Beata Agustin

Date: 11/14/2023 4:53:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.

Malem Luwang
Date: 11/14/2023 5:45:00 AM

Thank you so much for warm welcoming words, I feel blessed to become a part of this community

Jackie Elston

Date: 11/14/2023 1:53:00 AM

ahh what lovely words. 'that laugh could bring to life a dying hope' well written poet. J.

Malem Luwang
Date: 11/14/2023 5:44:00 AM

Thank you so much for the kind words. It means a lot to me