Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

The Vow of Abuse

When love was new, she felt so sure that he
was perfect for her! Everywhere they’d go
together, and he’d call her constantly.
They quickly married, for he loved her so!

He made a promise; this is what he’d do:
watch over her forever, and she found
it so romantic, but she had no clue
how closely to that man she would be bound.

He certainly watched over her, for she
was forced to quit her job. Each dime she spent
was monitored. She had no privacy.
He even checked each email that she sent.

Too soon she learned he kept his vow too well.
To have someone watch over her was hell.

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Debbie Duncan May 23, 2013 at 6:28 PM well penned, I see you won with it as well. reads like a " Lifetime movie"

Phyllis Babcock May 21, 2013 at 10:33 PM That is a great poem on abuse and what happens. Well done on this one and I see it was a winner. Congrats on it. love phyl

Poet Destroyer A May 20, 2013 at 9:35 PM Andrea, this is a very touching subject when one abuses the power and love of vows. Congratulations, in Susan's "ABUSE" contest... Goodnight **PD

Joseph May May 20, 2013 at 6:04 AM congrats on a great win Andrea

Skat A May 19, 2013 at 9:33 PM Hi Andrea, A deep winning poem of abuse. Congratulations, *Luv ~ SKAT~

Therese Bacha May 19, 2013 at 9:21 PM Congratulation Andrea, very smooth poem. In a few words a lot was written. Love Terry xoxoxo a 7>>> FAV.

Donna Jones May 19, 2013 at 6:28 PM Very real abuse...congratulations Andrea ...great topic and win

Richard Lamoureux May 16, 2013 at 6:30 PM Very powerful, I just wrote my first Sonnet so thought I would check out one of yours to see if I am on track.

Harry Horsman May 15, 2013 at 3:13 PM wow Andrea, i like how you tell this,, a marriage of one sided ownership, this is so good,

Robert Johnson May 14, 2013 at 1:13 PM Hold on too tight, it slips away. We've all heard it said in many ways. Young love so promising, but that was then. So sad when it's told again and again. A prayer for peace and a breath of fresh air. A solemn vow that they both can share. Peace Andrea. :) This is a gritty one.

Jack Horne May 11, 2013 at 3:00 PM chilling and powerful write, Andrea - a big winner for sure

Charlotte Puddifoot May 10, 2013 at 5:12 PM hi andrea, this is a good entry for the contest and the title is an excellent one; there is truth in this, effective and affecting, I can relate to your words here...

Bl Devnath May 10, 2013 at 4:18 PM Suspect leads life to hell. It happens in life of many. Realistic approach. Thanks........., loved always, bl

Connie Gildersleeve May 10, 2013 at 4:10 PM Andrea nicely written. This happens way too often. Verbal, mental or physical abuse it all deadens one's soul. Thanks for sharing. Warm Smiles, Connie

Daver Austin May 10, 2013 at 1:14 PM God, do I hate control freaks! Hey! She can put one right between his eyes. Love, daver

Tim Ryerson May 10, 2013 at 9:16 AM As John Lennon sang "The dream is over"...Good stuff here, Andie...Actually this poem makes me mad...Nothing but insecurity here - Tim

Painted Hunter May 10, 2013 at 6:33 AM I know some couples like this...a little jealousy is a good thing...too much is a terrible thing. Great write, Andrea.

Timothy Hicks May 10, 2013 at 12:13 AM I've seen a taste of relationships like this (though the roles were reversed... the girl being the overseer). Best of luck on the contest! I wrote about abuse awhile back... though it goes way over 16 lines and touches on a very sensitive topic. When I become brave I'll post it.

Lucilla Carrillo May 9, 2013 at 10:58 PM Right on girl. I agree with you. To have someone watch over you. is OK, but not that way. Thanks for sharing, Lucilla

Ilene Bauer May 9, 2013 at 4:58 PM you've captured the way this story often goes down so well! i think your final couplet is brilliant!

Richard D Seal May 9, 2013 at 4:19 PM I've seen this go both ways, over possessiveness is a poison to any relationship. A very good write on this subject. You might do well to write a book of poems for would be brides. Take care, Richard

Demetrios Trifiatis May 9, 2013 at 4:11 PM What a terrible thing! Here is our demon who first was disguised as saint! Sad story but many times true! Beautiful writing though! Thank you!

Joe Maverick May 9, 2013 at 3:48 PM Quite true the picture portrayed Andrea..And i wonder if some..some meaning a few people don't even realise, or admit to themselves that this is the case..' If so how can it be ended??

Russell Sivey May 9, 2013 at 2:17 PM I'm glad you pointed out that not all abuse if physical abuse, there is also mental abuse (and sexual abuse)! The one abuse that seems to accompany one or both of the other abuses is mental abuse, it can also exist alone! This is a prime example of how mental abuse can exist alone! This is a sad tale, I am deeply saddened by this write, it is troubling as well! And this is due to the fact that you have written it so very well! What an amazing piece you have written, Great Work!!

Jack Jordan May 9, 2013 at 10:25 AM Ouch! Unfortunately I've known women in that situation. What does one do? Escape, I hope... Jack

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