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The Vow of Abuse

When love was new, she felt so sure that he was perfect for her! Everywhere they’d go together, and he’d call her constantly. They quickly married, for he loved her so! He made a promise; this is what he’d do: watch over her forever, and she found it so romantic, but she had no clue how closely to that man she would be bound. He certainly watched over her, for she was forced to quit her job. Each dime she spent was monitored. She had no privacy. He even checked each email that she sent. Too soon she learned he kept his vow too well. To have someone watch over her was hell.

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 5/23/2013 6:28:00 PM

well penned, I see you won with it as well. reads like a " Lifetime movie"

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/21/2013 10:33:00 PM

That is a great poem on abuse and what happens. Well done on this one and I see it was a winner. Congrats on it. love phyl

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/20/2013 9:35:00 PM

Andrea, this is a very touching subject when one abuses the power and love of vows. Congratulations, in Susan's "ABUSE" contest... Goodnight **PD

Joseph May

Date: 5/20/2013 6:04:00 AM

congrats on a great win Andrea

Skat A

Date: 5/19/2013 9:33:00 PM

Hi Andrea, A deep winning poem of abuse. Congratulations, *Luv ~ SKAT~

Therese Bacha

Date: 5/19/2013 9:21:00 PM

Congratulation Andrea, very smooth poem. In a few words a lot was written. Love Terry xoxoxo a 7>>> FAV.

Donna Jones

Date: 5/19/2013 6:28:00 PM

Very real abuse...congratulations Andrea ...great topic and win

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/16/2013 6:30:00 PM

Very powerful, I just wrote my first Sonnet so thought I would check out one of yours to see if I am on track.

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/15/2013 3:13:00 PM

wow Andrea, i like how you tell this,, a marriage of one sided ownership, this is so good,

Robert Johnson

Date: 5/14/2013 1:13:00 PM

Hold on too tight, it slips away. We've all heard it said in many ways. Young love so promising, but that was then. So sad when it's told again and again. A prayer for peace and a breath of fresh air. A solemn vow that they both can share. Peace Andrea. :) This is a gritty one.

Jack Horne

Date: 5/11/2013 3:00:00 PM

chilling and powerful write, Andrea - a big winner for sure

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 5/10/2013 5:12:00 PM

hi andrea, this is a good entry for the contest and the title is an excellent one; there is truth in this, effective and affecting, I can relate to your words here...

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/10/2013 4:18:00 PM

Suspect leads life to hell. It happens in life of many. Realistic approach. Thanks........., loved always, bl

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 5/10/2013 4:10:00 PM

Andrea nicely written. This happens way too often. Verbal, mental or physical abuse it all deadens one's soul. Thanks for sharing. Warm Smiles, Connie

Daver Austin

Date: 5/10/2013 1:14:00 PM

God, do I hate control freaks! Hey! She can put one right between his eyes. Love, daver

Tim Ryerson

Date: 5/10/2013 9:16:00 AM

As John Lennon sang "The dream is over"...Good stuff here, Andie...Actually this poem makes me mad...Nothing but insecurity here - Tim

Painted Hunter

Date: 5/10/2013 6:33:00 AM

I know some couples like this...a little jealousy is a good thing...too much is a terrible thing. Great write, Andrea.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/10/2013 12:13:00 AM

I've seen a taste of relationships like this (though the roles were reversed... the girl being the overseer). Best of luck on the contest! I wrote about abuse awhile back... though it goes way over 16 lines and touches on a very sensitive topic. When I become brave I'll post it.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 5/9/2013 10:58:00 PM

Right on girl. I agree with you. To have someone watch over you. is OK, but not that way. Thanks for sharing, Lucilla

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/9/2013 4:58:00 PM

you've captured the way this story often goes down so well! i think your final couplet is brilliant!

Richard D Seal

Date: 5/9/2013 4:19:00 PM

I've seen this go both ways, over possessiveness is a poison to any relationship. A very good write on this subject. You might do well to write a book of poems for would be brides. Take care, Richard

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/9/2013 4:11:00 PM

What a terrible thing! Here is our demon who first was disguised as saint! Sad story but many times true! Beautiful writing though! Thank you!

Joe Maverick

Date: 5/9/2013 3:48:00 PM

Quite true the picture portrayed Andrea..And i wonder if some..some meaning a few people don't even realise, or admit to themselves that this is the case..' If so how can it be ended??

Russell Sivey

Date: 5/9/2013 2:17:00 PM

I'm glad you pointed out that not all abuse if physical abuse, there is also mental abuse (and sexual abuse)! The one abuse that seems to accompany one or both of the other abuses is mental abuse, it can also exist alone! This is a prime example of how mental abuse can exist alone! This is a sad tale, I am deeply saddened by this write, it is troubling as well! And this is due to the fact that you have written it so very well! What an amazing piece you have written, Great Work!!

Jack Jordan

Date: 5/9/2013 10:25:00 AM

Ouch! Unfortunately I've known women in that situation. What does one do? Escape, I hope... Jack