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The View Without a View

sun bleached porch swing creaks a crow scolds a calico bird seed turns to dust 2.1.2020

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/12/2020 8:53:00 PM

..... the passage of time with every creak of the swing, and purr of the cat. A whole scene is fumigating in my head with little to go off of. That last line is fascinating.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/12/2020 9:18:00 PM

I am really pleased with this one. I am thrilled with your positive critique. I told you few of my haiku I thought were really any good and truly haiku, this is one of them, thank you my friend. xomo

Jeff Connelly

Date: 3/21/2020 6:30:00 PM

One written the day before my trip. Such distinct images Maureen with each line, but the last puts everything within a time warp of sorts; as if the other lines happened perhaps so long ago.... Thanks always Maureen.

Jeff Connelly
Date: 3/23/2020 8:05:00 PM

As well you should be!!!!!!!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/23/2020 9:40:00 AM

Thank you!!! I'm particularly proud of this one. xomo!

Robert Kinard

Date: 2/21/2020 12:26:00 AM

This is an image I would like to see painted.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/21/2020 7:47:00 AM

Thank you Robert. I paint, but believe I'm a sculptor at heart, that I paint and write like a sculptor. ;), xomo

P.M. Richter

Date: 2/17/2020 10:06:00 AM

What an image ~ congratulations on your win :)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/21/2020 7:41:00 AM

Thank you! xomo!

Ann Foster

Date: 2/9/2020 2:05:00 PM

This was hauntingly lovely. I can feel the empty plains all around... the dust devil in the distance... I so love birds... God always remembers them, all of them... Well written... applause, by tiny elves, that can fit into this machine. Well done... Ann

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/10/2020 7:20:00 AM

How to ku about missing songbirds, my best effort, thank you Lovely. My heart aches for them. xomo

Paul Callus

Date: 2/7/2020 9:48:00 AM

Very imaginative, Maureen. I watch from behind the curtain and see the implications. ~ Regards // paul

Quoth Theraven

Date: 2/4/2020 9:48:00 PM

Maureen, You have an unwavering eye to detail. It's thrilling to listen to Karen Carpenter while wishing for the calico' eyes to turn away. -R

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/4/2020 8:38:00 PM

Can just picture this, Maureen---precisely. When did you see our porch here in Chicago?! LOL. Very, very resonant image. Awesome! Warmest wishes, Gershon

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 2/3/2020 11:31:00 PM

I like this poem, will that calico ever let that crow get seed? I know you like birds, check out my poem : "Bird Looked At Me"

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/3/2020 8:56:00 AM

I like the melancholy feel of this piece.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 9:14:00 AM

Thank you!!! I really tried for that :))) xomo

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/3/2020 7:28:00 AM

Outstanding Haiku dearest, Maureen! Hugs xxx

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:54:00 AM

Thank you my friend! Warm hugs and sunshine kisses, xomo

Eve Roper

Date: 2/2/2020 9:47:00 PM

Awesome image you have created, Maureen. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:53:00 AM

Thank you Eve! Warm hugs, xomo

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/2/2020 8:07:00 PM

When it comes to great visualization, it doesn't get any better then these 3 lines. Wishing you a beautiful day xo

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:51:00 AM

Thank you so much! Hugs and Sunshine, xomo

John Lawless

Date: 2/2/2020 2:54:00 PM

Very nicely done Mo, an Haiku moment captured.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:49:00 AM

Thank you John, xomo!

Silent One

Date: 2/2/2020 1:02:00 PM

Oooh.... Nice ku

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:48:00 AM

Thank you bunny bud

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/2/2020 12:33:00 PM

- Congratulations on your wonderful haiku, Maureen :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:47:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise, warm hugs! xomo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/2/2020 9:31:00 AM

Wow. Your ku is amazing. Congrats on win

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:46:00 AM

Thank you Andrea! I really tried to paint a mood with this one. xomo

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/1/2020 11:36:00 PM

A lovely picture Maureen, congrats. Tom

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:40:00 AM

Thank you Tom. Hugs! xomo

Jenish Somadas

Date: 2/1/2020 11:13:00 PM

a crow scolds a calico... lol.. Wonderful imagination.. Congrats on your fantastic win Maureen...

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:39:00 AM

Tee hee ;), you know that's where this one started. Thank you Jenish! xomo

Peter W Iversen

Date: 2/1/2020 9:05:00 PM

Very nice. Did the calico have a grin like 'The Cheshire Cat'?

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/3/2020 7:37:00 AM

With a feather stuck in its teeth ;), thank you Peter! xomo

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/1/2020 6:56:00 PM

wow! you've painted such a vivid picture here, maureen...

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/1/2020 7:04:00 PM

Thank you Ilene, xomo!

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/1/2020 6:31:00 PM

Bleak winter? No squirrels to eat bird seed? Naught to worry, as Spring is on the way! Aloha! Rico

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/1/2020 6:45:00 PM

Damn squirrels trying to get into this poem.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/1/2020 5:11:00 PM

You paint such vivid pictures with such brevity - this is bold and quiet at once-

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/1/2020 5:26:00 PM

Thank you so much Michelle. mo hugs