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The Troubled Roses

The hill wanted to be a rippling river and it opted for a sex change surgery The dancing falls now gurgle pink with two masters in maths and English She applied for a lecturer's chair where they asked not of her achievements If she has her breasts, if she menstruates, and so on went their dullard lips The roses in the valley suffer the piercing pain forcing the tears well up The cold hands have very recently got a warm bouquet from a private school June 19, 2018 For: When line SIX is a perfect FIX. Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Silent One

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Date: 6/23/2018 9:10:00 PM
Congratulations on your great win, Probir, :) ... Hugs Eve ~`*
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/23/2018 11:39:00 PM
Thank you, Eve ...
Date: 6/22/2018 5:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this profound poem!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/23/2018 12:18:00 AM
Thank you, Susan ...
Date: 6/21/2018 8:11:00 PM
A great message inside this one. Congrats for your win with your six line poem, Probir.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/21/2018 11:37:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea ...
Date: 6/21/2018 7:57:00 PM
Cruelty should not be a thorny problem for any rose, Probir. Captivating social commentary. Congratulations on your wonderful win! ~Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2018 9:55:00 AM
Yes, indeed dear Probir, point well taken my friend..
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/21/2018 11:42:00 PM
Right, Susan ... but the rose needs to remind us when necessary that it does possess the thorns to use under compulsion ... Thank you so much for the most welcome visit ... I am sorry that I cannot reciprocate because of my poor sociability quotient ...
Date: 6/20/2018 6:57:00 PM
- A skilled and great 6 line poem, from you Probir :) - It must have been difficult to judge, I think everyone is amazing, with different themes - Congratulations on a well deserved 2nd place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne -Lise :)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/20/2018 11:24:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sunshine ...
Date: 6/20/2018 6:53:00 PM
Congrats on your win in the contest with this edgy, thought-provoking write, Probir!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/20/2018 11:24:00 PM
Thank you so much, Gershon ...
Date: 6/20/2018 3:38:00 PM
Interesting take on the contest Probir.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/20/2018 11:28:00 PM
Thank you very much, Silent for considering the poem fit for the placement ...
Date: 6/19/2018 1:45:00 PM
The rose in the valley suffers, but it's thorns remain pointed and sharp! Nice write Probir...Good Luck in the contest! Charlie
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Probir Gupta
Date: 6/20/2018 1:53:00 AM
Thank you, Charles ... Your comment is metaphorically nicer ...

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