The Sun Has Set On Our Love

The moon has settled in on us, as the sun has gone away The night we thought we’d never see, has come to replace the day The love we thought would live forever is breathing its last breath It fought to live for quite some time but now has nothing left Our diminished love will live its days in darkness and in night A place beleaguered by the cold without the warmth of light We had our chance at timeless love, but alas its fate was met Our time in love is at an end as the sun has sadly set Written in Texas -JUL 2014

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Paul Callus

Date: 10/14/2016 8:06:00 AM

So sad, but that is what makes it beautiful, MC! I hope that by now the chill of lost love has ben replaced by the warmth of a new one! ~ Regards // paul

CayCay Jennings

Date: 10/10/2016 9:24:00 AM

This is a brevity-gem and I absolutely love it. Using as few words as possible to capture an emotion in poetry form is a favorite challenge of mine and you have done it beautiful. Each line is emotionally touching and poetically riveting. 7 and a FAV (nice to meet you, can't recall if we've crossed paths before) ... CayCay

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 10/10/2016 4:45:00 PM

Thanks CayCay! This one, I'm afraid, was born out of necessity... I felt compelled to write the antithesis of my poem "The Sun Will Never Set On Our Love". It took a while to find the right words. Thanks so much for reading and commenting. And, maybe, but I don't believe we have, but I'm happy to have found your work CayCay. MC

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/4/2015 1:09:00 AM

It's sad when love is gone but it's better to move on! Marquis I enjoyed this gem from your poetic pen and rate it a "7!" Have a happy Fourth of July! Pandita

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 3/20/2016 8:45:00 PM

Why thank you so much Ms. Sanchez and I apologize for my not answering much sooner. Please forgive me... MC

Patrick Nigros

Date: 5/26/2015 7:23:00 AM

Loving this piece.... Beautiful work... The sun has set.... the love is gone...

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 5/27/2015 5:22:00 PM

Thanks Patrick, I really appreciate you stopping by reading and commenting. It truly means a lot...Thank you! MC