Deb Wilson Poet Limerick

The Sugar Shack Is Closing

I adore sweets and that's just pathetic
cos' for ten years I've been diabetic.
When that pie rolls around 
or the muffins are crowned
my desire for them grows quite kinetic.

There are wrappers hidden under the bed
and there's leftover banana bread.
Every year I vow
to stop eating somehow.
If I keep this up I could be dead!

So I'll ring out the old-start anew.
I can do it if I think it through.
Throw the sugar away
and start over today.
Eating rabbit food's what I'll now do!

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Sara Kendrick January 18, 2013 at 4:48 AM Congrats on your winning work..Being diabetic is very difficult..It is not so easy to eat healthy..Sara

Andrea Dietrich January 17, 2013 at 11:14 PM I just knew this had to be a big winner. You did GREAT. Congrats, Deb.

Carrie Richards January 16, 2013 at 7:03 PM Everything in moderation perhaps??? Great limerick and much congratulations...and good luck sticking to your resolution to stay healthy!!

Kash Poet January 15, 2013 at 10:10 AM Very Nice Deb!Congrats on your big win.

Poet Destroyer A January 15, 2013 at 8:29 AM Deb, ~ congratulations with the awesome win in Rix's "A Limerick in My Pocket Contest " contest. LOL... to the rabbit diet.. have yourself a nice day~ xox~PD

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl January 15, 2013 at 7:23 AM Congratulations on your top spot Debs xx

Ilene Bauer January 15, 2013 at 5:39 AM this is wonderful, from the title to the very last line. congratulations on your well-deserved win!

Gwendolen Song January 14, 2013 at 7:48 PM Hilarious and educational...I sensed the cravings that u struggle with as I read along...the first and second stanzas were mighty powerful, Deb...a great entry!

Harry Horsman January 3, 2013 at 8:15 AM these are wonderful Deb,, will touch so many with the message... happy new year

Andrea Dietrich January 2, 2013 at 11:48 AM I enjoyed these too, Deb. And hey, there are lots of things just as good as sugary foods. My hubbie got diagnosed with borderline diabetes last year. Amazingly, all he had to give up were all his COKES he drank in HUGE big gulp cups each day and he lost 30 pounds. It makes me sick . If only I could lose weight that easily. He still eats lots of sweets, but at least he takes pills now and is thinner. I wish you good luck with your resolution. Try sugar free candies!!

Russell Sivey January 2, 2013 at 3:25 AM This is a perfect write on diabetes! It sucks if you really have that, I empathize with you if you do! I have relatives that have it and I see how hard it is for them! It makes me glad that I don't have it! This is a wondrous and glorious write on this subject! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this incredible poem this morning my friend! What a powerful yet funny piece, very creative, Great Work!!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl January 2, 2013 at 1:36 AM Love it these are brilliant xx