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The Subtle Knife

Beg for sadness, end
Fighting, a castrated peace
Open cuts, betray

©Drake J. Eszes

"Fighting for peace is like screwing for virginity." -Carlin

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Sandy Ivy D

March 22, 2014 at 9:42 PM

Powerful senryu. SandyIvy

Poet Tacito

March 24, 2014 at 11:34 PM

I appreciate that. Thanks!

Michael Dom

December 27, 2013 at 8:30 PM

Reads like salt on paper cuts.

Betty Bateson

December 25, 2013 at 9:32 AM

Yours are sharp words and so very true.

Poet Tacito

December 27, 2013 at 8:41 AM

Many thanks, Betty. I do appreciate it.

Donna Jones

December 22, 2013 at 6:03 PM

H yes

Poet Tacito

December 22, 2013 at 8:43 PM

LOL! Awesome. :)

Kelly Deschler

December 18, 2013 at 8:16 PM

When we have to fight for peace, no one wins. Peace should be free for everyone to enjoy, like fresh air and sunshine. What's the point of fighting over something that we already have access to in our own hearts? A very powerful message in this poem! Amazing work, Drake!

Poet Tacito

December 19, 2013 at 7:17 AM

Hell yeah, Kelly! Definitely! I absolutely couldn't agree more. When an entity or group has to tell adults that treating others poorly is wrong, that is the equivalent to McDonalds' warning labels on cups that coffee is hot.

James Kelley

December 16, 2013 at 8:31 AM

shiiiiitttt-ake mushrooms...

James Kelley

December 16, 2013 at 11:04 AM

LOL

Poet Tacito

December 16, 2013 at 8:45 AM

HAHAHAHAH! YES! Agreed.

Laura Breidenthal

December 13, 2013 at 8:43 PM

A very thoughtful verse here. Rewarding to read- thanks for sharing. : ) Always, Laura

Poet Tacito

December 16, 2013 at 8:45 AM

And thank you for stopping by, Laura! =)

Chuck Melugin

December 13, 2013 at 4:56 PM

Drake Well said and true! Truth has an unwelcome ring! My Best, chuck

Poet Tacito

December 16, 2013 at 8:45 AM

Thank you very much, Chuck! Yes, quite right!

Richard Lamoureux

December 13, 2013 at 8:53 AM

Good morning Drake.

Poet Tacito

December 13, 2013 at 12:28 PM

Hola sir!

Eileen Manassian

December 11, 2013 at 3:15 PM

Hey! Just passing by...Miss ya! Hugs

Poet Tacito

December 12, 2013 at 10:02 AM

And hi to you too. =) Hugs!

Monterey Sirak

December 11, 2013 at 7:51 AM

Yes, sometimes peace seems to be the most fought over concept. Your talent for exposing the bare belly of truth amazes me.

Poet Tacito

December 11, 2013 at 8:51 AM

It's one of the saddest ironies of our time. Yet, the sheep continue to walk that path in cotton bunches of immaturity. Thank you so much, Monterey!

Richard Lamoureux

December 11, 2013 at 7:47 AM

Good morning Drake.

Poet Tacito

December 11, 2013 at 8:50 AM

Hola!

Nette Onclaud

December 11, 2013 at 4:20 AM

piercing way to clamor for peace, drake... i am blown by the magnitude of your message in just a few words.. some kind of awesome!.. huggs

Poet Tacito

December 11, 2013 at 6:09 AM

Then you see/understand the bigger goal here. I'm so grateful for you, Nette. We're long overdue on a Skype chat. Hug!

James Marshall Goff

December 10, 2013 at 7:08 PM

True that...Thanks for stopping by, I was channeling Bly's "Men's Retreat!"

Poet Tacito

December 11, 2013 at 6:08 AM

HA! Awesome! =D Makes total sense. Thanks so much, Jimbo!

Sarai Virden

December 10, 2013 at 11:31 AM

You never cease to amaze with your talent. Always so thoughtfully deep. Hugs

Poet Tacito

December 11, 2013 at 5:58 AM

Awesome. I'm very glad to hear that, Sarai. Thank you!

Andrea Dietrich

December 10, 2013 at 9:27 AM

a powerful one, Drake!! what a quote you put with it!!!

Poet Tacito

December 10, 2013 at 9:32 AM

I absolutely appreciate that, Andrea. Truly. :)

Richard Lamoureux

December 10, 2013 at 8:58 AM

I do love that quote from Carlin. Thanks for making me smile. "castrated peace" what a great coupling of words!

Poet Tacito

December 10, 2013 at 9:01 AM

Yes, that quote resounds strongly with me. You're very welcome, Richard! =D

Russell Sivey

December 10, 2013 at 4:56 AM

Wow, the power behind your words is extremely exceptional my friend! You have impressed me wit this Senryu, a form I haven't seen you try yet, but it suits you well, you did very awesome with it! "...screwing for virginity" Ha ha now that is funny, but also a very serious ring to it! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this illustrious piece Drake, What a fabulous poem, Great Work!!

Poet Tacito

December 10, 2013 at 8:59 AM

I've dabbled in a few Senryus in my time. ;-) But, I do WHOLLY appreciate it. =D You rock, Russell. Thank you!