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The Subtle Knife

Beg for sadness, end
Fighting, a castrated peace
Open cuts, betray

©Drake J. Eszes

"Fighting for peace is like screwing for virginity." -Carlin

Copyright © Poet Tacito | Year Posted 2013

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Sandy Ivy D Date: 3/22/2014 9:42:00 PM Powerful senryu. SandyIvy Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 3/24/2014 11:34:00 PM I appreciate that. Thanks!

Michael Dom Date: 12/27/2013 8:30:00 PM Reads like salt on paper cuts. Login to Reply

Betty Bateson Date: 12/25/2013 9:32:00 AM Yours are sharp words and so very true. Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/27/2013 8:41:00 AM Many thanks, Betty. I do appreciate it.

Donna Jones Date: 12/22/2013 6:03:00 PM H yes Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/22/2013 8:43:00 PM LOL! Awesome. :)

Kelly Deschler Date: 12/18/2013 8:16:00 PM When we have to fight for peace, no one wins. Peace should be free for everyone to enjoy, like fresh air and sunshine. What's the point of fighting over something that we already have access to in our own hearts? A very powerful message in this poem! Amazing work, Drake! Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/19/2013 7:17:00 AM Hell yeah, Kelly! Definitely! I absolutely couldn't agree more. When an entity or group has to tell adults that treating others poorly is wrong, that is the equivalent to McDonalds' warning labels on cups that coffee is hot.

James Kelley Date: 12/16/2013 8:31:00 AM shiiiiitttt-ake mushrooms... Login to Reply James Kelley Date: 12/16/2013 11:04:00 AM LOL Poet Tacito Date: 12/16/2013 8:45:00 AM HAHAHAHAH! YES! Agreed.

Laura Breidenthal Date: 12/13/2013 8:43:00 PM A very thoughtful verse here. Rewarding to read- thanks for sharing. : ) Always, Laura Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/16/2013 8:45:00 AM And thank you for stopping by, Laura! =)

Chuck Melugin Date: 12/13/2013 4:56:00 PM Drake Well said and true! Truth has an unwelcome ring! My Best, chuck Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/16/2013 8:45:00 AM Thank you very much, Chuck! Yes, quite right!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/13/2013 8:53:00 AM Good morning Drake. Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/13/2013 12:28:00 PM Hola sir!

Eileen Manassian Date: 12/11/2013 3:15:00 PM Hey! Just passing by...Miss ya! Hugs Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/12/2013 10:02:00 AM And hi to you too. =) Hugs!

Monterey Sirak Date: 12/11/2013 7:51:00 AM Yes, sometimes peace seems to be the most fought over concept. Your talent for exposing the bare belly of truth amazes me. Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/11/2013 8:51:00 AM It's one of the saddest ironies of our time. Yet, the sheep continue to walk that path in cotton bunches of immaturity. Thank you so much, Monterey!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/11/2013 7:47:00 AM Good morning Drake. Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/11/2013 8:50:00 AM Hola!

Nette Onclaud Date: 12/11/2013 4:20:00 AM piercing way to clamor for peace, drake... i am blown by the magnitude of your message in just a few words.. some kind of awesome!.. huggs Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/11/2013 6:09:00 AM Then you see/understand the bigger goal here. I'm so grateful for you, Nette. We're long overdue on a Skype chat. Hug!

James Marshall Goff Date: 12/10/2013 7:08:00 PM True that...Thanks for stopping by, I was channeling Bly's "Men's Retreat!" Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/11/2013 6:08:00 AM HA! Awesome! =D Makes total sense. Thanks so much, Jimbo!

Sarai Virden Date: 12/10/2013 11:31:00 AM You never cease to amaze with your talent. Always so thoughtfully deep. Hugs Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/11/2013 5:58:00 AM Awesome. I'm very glad to hear that, Sarai. Thank you!

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/10/2013 9:27:00 AM a powerful one, Drake!! what a quote you put with it!!! Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/10/2013 9:32:00 AM I absolutely appreciate that, Andrea. Truly. :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/10/2013 8:58:00 AM I do love that quote from Carlin. Thanks for making me smile. "castrated peace" what a great coupling of words! Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/10/2013 9:01:00 AM Yes, that quote resounds strongly with me. You're very welcome, Richard! =D

Russell Sivey Date: 12/10/2013 4:56:00 AM Wow, the power behind your words is extremely exceptional my friend! You have impressed me wit this Senryu, a form I haven't seen you try yet, but it suits you well, you did very awesome with it! "...screwing for virginity" Ha ha now that is funny, but also a very serious ring to it! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this illustrious piece Drake, What a fabulous poem, Great Work!! Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/10/2013 8:59:00 AM I've dabbled in a few Senryus in my time. ;-) But, I do WHOLLY appreciate it. =D You rock, Russell. Thank you!

Eileen Manassian Date: 12/9/2013 1:01:00 PM Drake, my dear........you tell 'em! Lovely write full of desire and longing for a better more peaceful existence. Great job! Hugs Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/9/2013 1:03:00 PM I shall. Promise. ;-) Thank you, darling Eileen!

Charmaine Chircop Date: 12/9/2013 12:10:00 PM This says so much Drake...and makes much sense.As always..I love the way your ideas mingle..Excellent. Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/9/2013 12:14:00 PM Indeed, Charmaine. Thank you very, very much for that. =)

Donna Jones Date: 12/9/2013 10:49:00 AM Love your mind...love your quote...love where you take us.. Login to Reply Poet Tacito Date: 12/9/2013 10:56:00 AM And I value yours as well...thank you so much, Donna. =)