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Inspired by Jan Allisons

http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/stillbirth___love_without_hope___emotive_write_773002

 

The Stillness Dead Babies Do Not Cry From the moment of conception I was kept in the darkness Alone, crying, kicking One day I was brought into the light Air filled my lungs and sadness my soul From the first day of birth I smiled to hide incessant fear I stopped moving the moment I was born For the solitude and sadness of the womb Followed me my whole life

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Date: 4/3/2016 1:21:00 AM
That was quite compelling a read. Puzzling a bit to me, as the womb is often thought of a place of warmth. I wrote a poem in fact with that in mind not so long ago.
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arthur vaso
Date: 4/20/2016 10:50:00 PM
Thank you, yes I kinda wrote this the opposite of how it would seem based on Jans Poem! here :)
Date: 3/31/2016 12:02:00 AM
Heartfelt and a powerful truth Arthur. Wow!
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Date: 4/20/2016 10:49:00 PM
Thanks Michael!!
Date: 3/30/2016 8:13:00 PM
deep one, arthur!.. do visit me..huggs
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Date: 4/20/2016 10:46:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 3/30/2016 3:30:00 PM
this is a wowser, Arthur.So deep. I love it.
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Date: 4/20/2016 10:46:00 PM
Thank you Andrea! Sorry just catching up!!!! Hugs
Date: 3/30/2016 10:43:00 AM
this is sad...I like how you went with the perspective of the baby.
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Date: 4/20/2016 10:45:00 PM
Thanks Tim! :)
Date: 3/30/2016 3:53:00 AM
Oh Arthur I am so glad my emotive poem inspired you to write this - Bravo my friend:-)hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/31/2016 12:04:00 AM
Thank you, this was how hell I have no idea, but thank you
Date: 3/30/2016 12:16:00 AM
Excellent. Very emotional write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 3/31/2016 12:04:00 AM
Very kind of you Ravi
Date: 3/29/2016 11:38:00 PM
WoW! this is very emotional, Arthur, your words speak loud!!!!!
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Date: 3/31/2016 12:03:00 AM
Thank you so much Eve, your words warm my heart wit your kindness!