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The Squelch of Death

I heard the squelch of death again Now closer than it’s ever been— I can’t look back; I cannot pause, Lest it might overtake me then. I fear its face, its famished jaws, Its awesome eyes, its grasping claws, As close behind, that baleful tread, Relentless in pursuit, now draws. And though we choose to think instead Of gentler things not fraught with dread, Yet still we’ll hear that squelch again-- When Atropos will cut the thread. September 14, 2019 (This was written for Nina Parmenter's "Random Lines" contest... the line I chose was "I heard the squelch of death". Note that, for the contest entry, this was classified as a "Rhyme", which of course it is, but I am reclassifying it now more precisely.)

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Date: 11/19/2019 1:17:00 AM
This is really nice and I read your explanation. You selected Rubaiyat, The rhyming of the first Rubai is not correct... Again does not rhyme with been and then. Pain, rain, plain would have been much better. The second and third Rubai are great.
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Date: 11/19/2019 10:50:00 PM
Hi , Pashang. Yes, in British English "been" rhymes with "green" and "again" with "pain"; but in American English, both rhyme quite acceptably with "then" . (In other forms of American English, "been" is pronounced like "bin" not "ben"-- so I was aware the choice of rhymes for that Rubai was perhaps less than ideal; but not strictly wrong, either.) This was in any case not meant to be a formal Rubaiyat-- some of which I have written elsewhere. Thanks for your comment!
Date: 9/24/2019 9:02:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win...well written...love the 2nd verse especially.
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Date: 9/22/2019 9:44:00 AM
many congrats on your win JP:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/20/2019 11:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved second placement JP. Wonderful wit! : )
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Date: 9/21/2019 10:24:00 AM
Thanks so much for your kind comment, Connie!
Date: 9/20/2019 4:08:00 PM
Well done J. P.....
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J P Marmaro
Date: 9/21/2019 10:24:00 AM
Appreciate your encouragement, John!
Date: 9/20/2019 1:03:00 PM
Excellent thought-provoking content and and such a great rhythmic flow, JP. Congratulations.
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Date: 9/21/2019 10:26:00 AM
Thanks, Wendy!-- you can tell that I am a fan of Lewis Carroll and Edward Gorey, I don't doubt...
Date: 9/20/2019 12:26:00 PM
Back again to offer my compliments to your righteous 2nd Place honor ~ Aloha always William
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Date: 9/21/2019 10:28:00 AM
Thanks for your very considerate comments, William... though rather "singsong", I admit it's more akin to Edward Gorey than Mother Goose...
Date: 9/14/2019 7:00:00 PM
It's a Wow factor with a very well-balanced flow, thanks for a (sweltering) balmy Hawaii noon read--NICE! ~ Aloha always William
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