The Sparrows Sword

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As I lick the blood of battle Mighty sword glistening in the scorching sun My arm slowly lays it to the ground Falling, I stare blankly, up to the sky Dead All battles now won Love lost long ago

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Eve Roper

Date: 11/14/2017 9:00:00 PM

:-), amazing you are so talented . Hugs Eve

Arturo Michael

Date: 11/13/2017 10:19:00 AM

Very clear to see...Enjoyed it...All the best Arthur

Tim Smith

Date: 11/13/2017 10:00:00 AM

Excellent take Arthur...the battles make us stronger

Lin Lane

Date: 11/13/2017 7:50:00 AM

Life can truly be a battle in many ways, but to die from lost love is not on my list of things worthy of taking a life. Your pen is hovering over an abyss of noir ink. I understand but would offer you a transfusion to highlight the shadows. Pick up your sword...your battle has not ended.

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/14/2017 8:44:00 PM

Thank you Lin, hugs!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/13/2017 6:56:00 AM

Powerful write, Arthur:)

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/14/2017 8:44:00 PM

Thank you Jo Daniel

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/13/2017 4:47:00 AM

The sadness at the end was very striking, and terribly depressing! I really loved the power behind your words, such expressed with passion, especially how this poem ended...the incredibly wondrous love of the lost! What a grand poem, Great Work my friend!!

Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/14/2017 8:43:00 PM

Thanks Russell