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Inspired by a collab by Seren Roberts and Tim Smith

 

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As I lick the blood of battle Mighty sword glistening in the scorching sun My arm slowly lays it to the ground Falling, I stare blankly, up to the sky Dead All battles now won Love lost long ago

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Date: 11/14/2017 9:00:00 PM
:-), amazing you are so talented . Hugs Eve
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Date: 11/13/2017 10:19:00 AM
Very clear to see...Enjoyed it...All the best Arthur
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Date: 11/13/2017 10:00:00 AM
Excellent take Arthur...the battles make us stronger
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Date: 11/13/2017 7:50:00 AM
Life can truly be a battle in many ways, but to die from lost love is not on my list of things worthy of taking a life. Your pen is hovering over an abyss of noir ink. I understand but would offer you a transfusion to highlight the shadows. Pick up your sword...your battle has not ended.
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Date: 11/14/2017 8:44:00 PM
Thank you Lin, hugs!
Date: 11/13/2017 6:56:00 AM
Powerful write, Arthur:)
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Date: 11/14/2017 8:44:00 PM
Thank you Jo Daniel
Date: 11/13/2017 4:47:00 AM
The sadness at the end was very striking, and terribly depressing! I really loved the power behind your words, such expressed with passion, especially how this poem ended...the incredibly wondrous love of the lost! What a grand poem, Great Work my friend!!
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Date: 11/14/2017 8:43:00 PM
Thanks Russell