The Solar Parody System

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Poetic Form: Kimo
Inspired: 2023 December 10
Image: The tallest mountain in the solar system Olympus Mons by Reddit

Tallest mountain in the solar system. Olympus mons(on Mars) : r/interestingasfuck

Abandoned Yellow Star, Existential apostle. Solar flares haunt outworlds, "I'm It, you're not." Mercury, Mary's star loved from afar. Hot but not the hottest star. A tiny lifeless star. Venus will have more sunlight in her hair. Acid clouds, corrosive ground. A great task, you won't last. Mars, Ray Bradbury's & Poe's summer home. Famed Martian golf balls canals. Mountain Mons view Earthsets. Jupiter planet King. Juno caught clouds aided by sprites and elves. It passes gas, no solids. Saturn, Trump's hide-a-way post Mar-La-Go Eyes like Godiva's, you'll see. Ocean moon, life likely. Uranus ... home planet of many Ex's. Twenty years long each season. Tad colder than Neptune. Neptune ice-cold Hunter. 1300 mph. One hundred sixty-five years per Biden. Pluto is a dwarf planet, not full-sized. Other planets ... still too close. Latter cause for exile.

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Silent One

Date: 12/11/2023 10:45:00 AM

an intergalactic set of kimo's here... Interesting descriptions for the different planets here...

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/11/2023 10:53:00 AM

Thanks, Silent One. I'm working around, got the Kimo, Mono not happy will get back to that, there's one thing but can't say. Anyway, there's a lot of Poetic Form that I'd like doing, so away I go, my friend. Aloha, William

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/10/2023 7:22:00 PM

Wow, I absolutely love the creativity that you've jnfused in every kimo whilst giving information about the planets, makes it such an enjoyable read and one that remains on the mind long after. All these planets found their unique recognition in your words here, quite impeccably done! Have a beautiful week ahead :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 8:40:00 PM

I most appreciate, your visiting and sharing, Hiya. A wonderful welcoming it is, my friend. Aloha, William.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/10/2023 6:04:00 PM

a well constructed string of Kimos. I'd never thought of stringing several together. The imagery you created for each planet was stunning. I also liked the information on each planet. This is creative and brilliant. Must fave! Have a great evening, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 6:25:00 PM

Wow, I just posted it and did other stuff, and voila, 'tis charming, Sara. Eh, once it goes public as an unclaimed 'this is how it is.' Oh, and thanks FOR that great evening, my friend. Aloha, William