The Small Tan Sparrow

Poet's Notes

(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Sara Kendrick.

The sparrow touched down briefly..Looked directly into my eyes giving me a poem that is penned for life..Sara

The Sparrow took a break from flight Approaching with landing gear down Touched upon the white painted post from height Looked directly into my eyes with his eyes_that clown Those brown small eyes directly into my depth How I would love to just sit and commune Those tiny legs holding that dark tan body The body that nervously bounced around Watching, listening for any foe that could devour Short was the moment maybe thirty seconds Then he was gone How so much like life_some relationships just don't last

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Peter Golden

Date: 11/17/2010 4:01:00 PM

Brilliant, maybe a commer or a pause, where... I simly applaud. The words tell me many things: a poetic soul who exposes themselves with sensitivty, of loss, a soul that many of us desire. For your loss I cannot help. Pomposity over, I am in your debt, a truely wonderful write, a pleasure to have read. Thank you.

David Smalling

Date: 11/11/2010 11:20:00 AM

There is so much pain here ... so real and analogy ... and the forbeoding sense of tragedy it carries.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/3/2010 1:36:00 PM

Sara, this one was awesome. I love when this kind of thing happens in life. Just out of the blue. And the way you tied it to friendships. Superb. a FAV for me! how did I ever miss it?

Kim Hilliker

Date: 10/30/2010 12:33:00 PM

The correlation between the Sparrow and relationships was excellent. Nice write.

Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 10/30/2010 12:06:00 PM

Excellent. I'm a bird watcher so I know how they flit but they are so welcome as a visitor to your life. :) Sheri

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/30/2010 11:56:00 AM

pondiferous--maybe not a word but you get the idea, good read, hope you have a good day at the fellowship church.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/30/2010 8:26:00 AM

Very interesting and cute write on the sparrows, Sara

Eamon Duffin

Date: 10/30/2010 7:59:00 AM

Hi. We have about 30 sparrows in our garden so loved this. Are they not a joy to watch. Loved the comparison to relationships at the end. Great write. Thanks, Eamon

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 10/30/2010 6:39:00 AM

Touching write with many meanings by Poet friend....enjoyed...Love Michael