The Sin

A Sin

In a daze attacked by bullets of pain
Sharp stings to the heart and soul
Another lie opens up for a rear view
The hour of departure reaches its goal
For in a field of gold lies the inevitable
My patience to unravel the truth 
Like a shadow on a wall she moves
Destroying what’s left between me and you
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Tugaff Avatar
April 1, 2009 at 1:18 PM
Gwen, welcome to the soupland. Nice poem. Ernilando
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March 16, 2009 at 3:59 PM
sheeesh! I agree w/Emily Dickinson! the top of my head just spun-out! really good poetry, Gwen! love it! "the hour of departure reaches it goal" so much in just one line! a new fav poem of mine, thx! Jim
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March 15, 2009 at 6:38 AM
Welcome, let me read more of you. Hope you will love it here as I do.
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March 14, 2009 at 4:15 PM
Welcome to the soup, want to read more of you
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March 14, 2009 at 3:38 PM
Much to think about in this poem. Nice use of imagery. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent with us. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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