The Silent Struggle

A night so bewitching
As the shadows cast a sense of dominance
Doors that rattle and bars that won’t bend 
Clawing and struggling in the frightful physical structure 
She is the caged rat 
Waiting in the lab as though she was forced to eat rotten food 
Ailments lay a bed of warning 
The daily strife that starts the mourning 
Of the death that waits 
Inside so hopeless and safe when left alone 
When left alone 
For her heart would rise if let out of the demise 
But for now she fights in silence
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Swanson Avatar
December 29, 2008 at 6:15 PM
Very powerful write, with vivid imagery and full of emotion, you did an excellent job. Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week! God bless and have a happy new year! Amy :)
Winter Avatar
December 29, 2008 at 10:27 AM
Congratulations Laura on your wonderful poetry being featured this week! Warmest wishes for a safe and happy new year! Love, Shar
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December 29, 2008 at 10:09 AM
Oh Laura, a silent struggle that some may face. I really liked the creative images you have prompted within this readers minds eye. Good job as I now want to say Congratulations for being featured here. Wonderful Poem Laura...
Jordan Avatar
December 29, 2008 at 8:51 AM
Laura - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – I hope the coming year has many blessings in store for you and those you love – God Bless, MJ
Washington Avatar
December 29, 2008 at 7:11 AM
Congrats on being featured this week
Strand Avatar
December 29, 2008 at 1:11 AM
Congrats on your feature write this week Laura.Rgds Brian
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December 28, 2008 at 5:34 PM
Congratulations Laura on "The Silent Struggle" being featured. Vince
Strand Avatar
September 15, 2008 at 12:05 AM
A poerful reminder of our steardship responsibilities Laura.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
September 14, 2008 at 4:18 PM
Struggles like that test our faith to the hilt. For loved ones, there's sense of helplessness. For the person, there's a period of coming face t face with their own mortality. Well written. Vince
Winter Avatar
September 14, 2008 at 7:45 AM
Gosh Laura, this is powerful. So much an inside look at a very difficult disease to bear, or to even have a loved one suffer from. Disturbing and upsetting, and so sad for many. Excellent write. Love, Shar
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September 13, 2008 at 3:20 PM
Hi Laura Wow! The imagery in this is quite astounding. Gives the feeling of being pinned in helpless unto itself, dependent yet within the aloneness a strong spirit that yearns to break free. As I was reading this I wanted so to free the little rat....saddend I could not....Excellent write Laura! Love Light Truth Patricia, Thanks for your support and comments as usual. Just got back from a trip from Valdez Alaska.
White Avatar
September 13, 2008 at 1:05 PM
very well written, this feels sad and helpless, like the flow and thanks for your comments, take care D-nyce
Foulk Avatar
September 13, 2008 at 10:23 AM
a beautiful poem and well written, enjoyed reading it.
Lakhera Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 10:43 PM
Some very fine images used in this poem..its really very dark within and the subject is very appealing.
Reynolds Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 7:07 PM
Yikes, whatever this is about, sounds dreadful and so closed in - I got claustraphobic just reading it - so dark and so sad. Well weitten, Laura, love Kristin :)
Jordan Avatar
September 12, 2008 at 6:56 PM
What a interesting subject to write about I must say that makes this poem special all in its own - very well written and very well done - Thanks for all the support and your friendship - God Bless
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