Charles Reese Poet Rondeau Redouble

The Shards of Life

Alone I walk among the shards of life
To see the things that I have left behind
I hope that I have minimized some strife
Because the things I do I can't unwind

When I examine the words some say, I find
That unkind ones will pierce just like a knife
There are mistakes I've made that seem unkind
Alone I walk among the shards of life

I search how to improve my lot in life
By seeking out what others cannot find
I hope that it would include a wife
To see the things that I have left behind
 
Now neatly woven in the shards of time
Are works  that prepare us for the afterlife
While showing others just what we left behind
I hope that I have minimized some strife

Now life should be just like that pocketknife
That has so many tools that lets us find
How best to use our talents throughout life
Because the things I do I can't unwind

Sometimes I wish that I could press rewind
To change the things that cause me so much strife
Sometimes I wish that I could have a sign
When I feel lost among the shards of life
Alone I walk


For the Rondeau Redouble Poetry Contest
Sponsored by L Milton Hankins
Wrote 6/04/2022

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Sam Kauffman July 7, 2022 at 11:49 AM Evocative poem on the life's regrets but all couched in an attitude of the desire to learn from them and make different choices. This is truly a poem of longing Charles. Congratulations on your win! Blessings. Charles Reese July 9, 2022 at 5:13 AM We all have highs and lows in life it's the choices we make that shape each life and we all could use a redo or 2 if that was possible. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem so much.

Christuraj Alex July 5, 2022 at 8:45 AM Great writing. Congratulations! Charles Reese July 9, 2022 at 5:14 AM Thanks, I am glad you enjoyed it

L Milton Hankins July 5, 2022 at 7:39 AM Congratulations, Charles on your fine placement in my contest. The form is not easily navigated, but you did a splendid job with a wonderful piece. Charles Reese July 9, 2022 at 5:15 AM I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was hoping for 1st but 4th is not bad either.

Paula Goldsmith June 11, 2022 at 12:23 PM "The Shards of Life" is a powerful write. A great ending. Have a great/blessed day writing away.................. Charles Reese June 11, 2022 at 12:48 PM I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Eve Roper June 6, 2022 at 7:02 PM Life of blessings , but then sometimes would love to rewind time back, I would try to change things if able. Enjoyed reading , Charles.. Blessings Charles Reese June 7, 2022 at 5:55 AM Thanks. your visits are always welcome. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Sotto Poet June 6, 2022 at 11:35 AM A Rondeau Redouble is a difficult undertaking, and it looks that you have performed admirably in attaining your objective. You deserve a great deal of respect for being able to write such wonderful poetry in this way. I welcome your feedback and appreciate the heads-up; I will make an attempt to find a more suitable sentence structure and revise it. Charles Reese June 7, 2022 at 5:54 AM Thanks, I had a couple of great teachers before I came on this site.I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Jeff Kyser June 6, 2022 at 7:30 AM Well done! I've tried a few of these - I agree, they are challenging. I try to view them as 1: summary outline, 2-5: expansion, 6: conclusion/new idea, but I don't always succeed there... Charles Reese June 7, 2022 at 5:52 AM Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I think your approach is sound. I hope you get inspired enough to enter the contest.

Jenna Logan June 5, 2022 at 1:24 AM A Rondeau Redouble is a difficult assignment and you have achieved the goal, Charles. Nicely created. Charles Reese June 5, 2022 at 10:45 AM Thank you for your kind words. I agree it is a very difficult style which is why I was surprised how easily I was to write this one. I a glad you liked it.

Connie Marcum Wong June 4, 2022 at 11:47 PM I give you a lot of credit for creating a wonderful poem in this form Charles. No way would I attempt writing in this form. I would murder it! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings xxoo Jeff Kyser June 6, 2022 at 7:30 AM Connie, Connie, you would have no trouble at all with these! Charles Reese June 5, 2022 at 10:43 AM Thank you for your kind words. This is only the 2nd time I have wrote 1 of these. The other is my poem "Life's Seven Seas". It is one of the first I submitted here 15 years ago. I actually introduce this style to the site. The 1 rule the site does not talk about is this style should be written in Iambic tetrameter or iambic pentameter. Both of mine are in iambic pentameter.