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At the font of her own misery she wept silently beneath a parapet sky of midnight blue Silver stars enmeshed and softened the water as she drew closer to the only venue of comfort she knew, ... Amongst the conference of moon's effulgence lay a quiet angel listening to the in and outs, of a sweet girl's breath A pear shaped tear fell on her pillowed cheek not a spark from the heavens could rouse her not a single whisper from Jala could end the sorrow that threatened to engulf her being ; At the brink of disaster a healing hand reached out softer then the caress of the breeze gentler then the brush of wings As she stood beneath the silver stars eyes glistening, she found the edge line of the water and giving it once last look, she embraced her fears and jumped.. June 23, 2021 Contest Name: The Shape Of Water Sponsor: Craig Cornish

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Date: 6/26/2021 11:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! "she embraced her fears and jumped." So sad. A powerful write. Enjoy your win with blessings.............
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Date: 6/25/2021 2:17:00 PM
- Very well written, Vie Rose :) - Congratulations :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/24/2021 1:26:00 AM
Bittersweet sadness guides the poem, Heartbreaking.....Delice
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Date: 6/23/2021 6:58:00 PM
Dear friend Rose, you have a profound meaning and excellent language, combined with wonderful symbolism. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 6/23/2021 12:19:00 PM
This feels deep my friend--unique take on the contest theme. I'm impressed by the power of your vocabulary.
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Date: 6/23/2021 1:44:00 PM
Thank you dear Vijay, when I write I let the spirit move me, and words are plucked from way back there, lol, I am sure you do that too, thank you for appreciate the trade and gift. :)
Date: 6/23/2021 11:31:00 AM
quite a sad poem. Suicides do not solve anything really. Nonetheless, the poem is full of imagery and beautiful to read. Hugs
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Date: 6/23/2021 1:43:00 PM
Thank you dear Victor, so many young people feel helpless and out of choices, some we can reach some are too far gone . Thanks for reading.