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Written on May 16th, 2025 for Rob Carmack's Song II - Breaking Benjamin - Far Away - with Scooter Ward Poetry Contest
Disconsolate obsidian waves crash over crumbling dunes, Sweeping afflicted grains of sand back into the depths, Dragging my paralysed soul with them. Engulfed in despondent riptides, I gasp for oxygen amongst rippling currents, As a fiery moon hangs precariously overhead. Blood-red reflections illuminate the stark waters, While calls of the lost sing to me, Like sirens beckoning sailors to their doom— Louder and louder, until it becomes unbearable. Flaring arms fill with cortisol, Burning, tangled within suffocating seaweed. Farther I get pulled from the shore; The horizon is growing fainter now with every somber beat of my heart. Isolation shrouds the thickening atmosphere. Saline leaks into my mouth, drying my tongue as I frantically spit it out. Hysterical laughter escapes through lips without realisation. Dehydration overcomes. Sanity slips with each sip of water. My larynx sharply tightens— Barely a noise can be uttered. Yet the siren calls of the irretrievable continue to crescendo, Pulling me into an empty expanse, everlastingly.

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Date: 5/19/2025 4:03:00 PM
great poem -feels like a nightmare!
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Sara Jama
Date: 5/20/2025 7:04:00 AM
Thank you very much.
Date: 5/17/2025 7:46:00 AM
How vividly youv described here in such a way that made me see through your picturesque lines dear grumpy! Absolutely love your subtle use of alliterations, imagery painted and also the flow of your words! I love their song " when angela fall" your way with words is always impressive! I might listen to this song and try this one! Best wishes for the contest! Sending you light always
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Sara Jama
Date: 5/17/2025 10:53:00 AM
Thank you Ink.
Date: 5/17/2025 5:39:00 AM
Glug glug. I think that's what you meant to say, in a nutshell. Seriously though, your detailed description of the last few moments of life is fascinating and horrifying at the same time. Especially those siren calls of lost souls. Yipe!
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Sara Jama
Date: 5/17/2025 10:54:00 AM
Thank you for the kind words and support.

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