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Premiere Contest WinnerThe Roller Coaster

The roller coaster leans into a sky the color death. Alongside pines, it winds its broken way, gripping earth’s gray stubble. In the moan of the wind, I conjure up the screams of children’s glee. For the Sijo Contest of Deborah Guenther Beachboard Now for Brian Strand's 'IMAGIST any form' Poetry Contest
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Evans Avatar
December 24, 2020 at 9:28 PM
Congratulations Andrea!
Watt Avatar
December 15, 2020 at 2:30 PM
I love your imagist entry, Andrea. Very descriptive and evocative. Big congrats for your top win with Brian ~ John
Dutta Avatar
December 15, 2020 at 6:33 AM
Big Congrats to Andrea. Always Topper.
Kauffman Avatar
December 14, 2020 at 10:49 AM
Love the "gripping," "leaning," "moan" and "glee" of your first place winner, Andrea! Wonderfully creative. Congratulations!
Ibeh Avatar
December 14, 2020 at 6:58 AM
Such a beauty this succinct poem is, Andrea!:-) Heartiest congratulations on first place win!
Ranaweera  Avatar
December 14, 2020 at 6:15 AM
A beautiful, uninterrupted scene!! Congratulations, Andrea, on your Top Win!!
Mcintosh Avatar
December 14, 2020 at 5:12 AM
Love this, Andrea... C O N G R A T S!!! and God bless you
Y. Avatar
December 14, 2020 at 4:57 AM
Hi Andrea, This is a good entry. I took me down memory lane. Although roller coasters are so terrifying, I love them! Congratulations on your top win in the contest. Have a great day, my friend:-) Alexis
Sirak Avatar
March 21, 2015 at 8:26 AM
This pic and your words made me think of the old wooden rollercoaster at Six Flags by St Louis. It was a thrilling ride as a child. Did you ever go?
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
March 20, 2015 at 1:08 PM
Big congrats on your win, Andrea!! I also like the picture. I guess it appeals to my dark-side! Yes, I found a couple more you-know-whats from you-know-who...as soon as I get my dang computer fixed, we can get them all together. Now that I'm starting to feel better, hopefully next week...hugs :))
A. Sharma Avatar
March 20, 2015 at 12:07 AM
Extremely creative write Andrea! Congrats on big win!
Onclaud Avatar
March 19, 2015 at 3:46 PM
you amaze me with your creativity, andie... sweet congrats on your fine win!.. huggs
Neels Avatar
March 19, 2015 at 3:35 PM
Awesome Andrea, congratulations on your win ;) hope your week has been a good one thus far!
Walker Avatar
March 19, 2015 at 6:49 AM
I'm going to use one of your words in your poem to describe how I felt when reading this; Gripping.
A   Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 11:41 PM
awesome win Andrea...PD
A  Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 11:08 PM
ANDREA, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~
Mohn Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 9:11 PM
What a thoughtful interpretation beautifully displayed...love it
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 7:51 PM
Congratulations on your win! Profound words in this deserving gem.
Callus Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 10:33 AM
What a captivating Sijo, Andrea! Appropriate subject matter; the cries of children's glee could so easily turn to ones of panic and fright. Congrats on a much deserved win. // paul
Trichet Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 12:35 AM
Very descriptive Andrea, you nailed it - high 5 to Hubby...
Guzzi Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 8:07 PM
Spooky & beautiful! Congratulations on your win. Light & Love
Haight Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 7:55 PM
Congratulations on your nice win, Andrea. I love the subject. It actually reminds me of the wonderful roller coaster that was demolished at Seaside, NJ, during Hurricane Sandy. We went there so many times over the years with kids and grand kids. The pictures shown in the news looked somewhat like your visual. Anyway, beautifully written, and congrats on your win. Hugs, Sandra
Shaw Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 6:53 PM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea! I absolutely love your chosen subject. Excellent idea! Hugs, Kimberly
Richards Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 6:13 PM
I agree......it looks as if a death-trap waiting to happen !! Well done, once again, Andrea! Congrats to you!
Gorelick Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 6:07 PM
I am terrified of them..Enjoyed your poem and your note below. Congrats. Barbara
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