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The roller coaster leans into a sky the color death. Alongside pines, it winds its broken way, gripping earth’s gray stubble. In the moan of the wind, I conjure up the screams of children’s glee. For the Sijo Contest of Deborah Guenther Beachboard

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 3/22/2015 10:51:00 AM
Andrea, nice reflective write.. I much enjoyed the reading of your winner!
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Date: 3/21/2015 8:26:00 AM
This pic and your words made me think of the old wooden rollercoaster at Six Flags by St Louis. It was a thrilling ride as a child. Did you ever go?
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Date: 3/20/2015 1:08:00 PM
Big congrats on your win, Andrea!! I also like the picture. I guess it appeals to my dark-side! Yes, I found a couple more you-know-whats from you-know-who...as soon as I get my dang computer fixed, we can get them all together. Now that I'm starting to feel better, hopefully next week...hugs :))
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Date: 3/20/2015 12:07:00 AM
Extremely creative write Andrea! Congrats on big win!
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Date: 3/19/2015 3:46:00 PM
you amaze me with your creativity, andie... sweet congrats on your fine win!.. huggs
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Date: 3/19/2015 3:35:00 PM
Awesome Andrea, congratulations on your win ;) hope your week has been a good one thus far!
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Date: 3/19/2015 6:49:00 AM
I'm going to use one of your words in your poem to describe how I felt when reading this; Gripping.
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Date: 3/18/2015 11:41:00 PM
awesome win Andrea...PD
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Date: 3/18/2015 11:08:00 PM
ANDREA, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~
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Date: 3/18/2015 9:11:00 PM
What a thoughtful interpretation beautifully displayed...love it
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Date: 3/18/2015 7:51:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! Profound words in this deserving gem.
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Date: 3/18/2015 10:33:00 AM
What a captivating Sijo, Andrea! Appropriate subject matter; the cries of children's glee could so easily turn to ones of panic and fright. Congrats on a much deserved win. // paul
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Date: 3/18/2015 12:35:00 AM
Very descriptive Andrea, you nailed it - high 5 to Hubby...
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Date: 3/17/2015 8:07:00 PM
Spooky & beautiful! Congratulations on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 3/17/2015 7:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your nice win, Andrea. I love the subject. It actually reminds me of the wonderful roller coaster that was demolished at Seaside, NJ, during Hurricane Sandy. We went there so many times over the years with kids and grand kids. The pictures shown in the news looked somewhat like your visual. Anyway, beautifully written, and congrats on your win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/17/2015 6:53:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea! I absolutely love your chosen subject. Excellent idea! Hugs, Kimberly
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Date: 3/17/2015 6:13:00 PM
I agree......it looks as if a death-trap waiting to happen !! Well done, once again, Andrea! Congrats to you!
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Date: 3/17/2015 6:07:00 PM
I am terrified of them..Enjoyed your poem and your note below. Congrats. Barbara
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Date: 3/17/2015 5:53:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/17/2015 5:23:00 PM
Congrats on a great win Andrea...it is a great line that fits the theme....
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Date: 3/17/2015 10:17:00 AM
I agree with hubbie. I've always thought roller coasters were terribly frightening. Your poem gives this thought an edge. Love, daver
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Date: 3/16/2015 11:35:00 PM
DING<~~~~ vote from james ! ;)
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Date: 3/16/2015 9:45:00 PM
Love the line "earth's gray stubble"! Love this Sijo. A Fav!
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Date: 3/16/2015 6:45:00 PM
Chilling...eerie...superb imagery with the three lines, Andrea.
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Date: 3/16/2015 6:36:00 PM
Kids daring death...yes, I can see that Andrea. They think they are invincible. I think Deb may really enjoy this.
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