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The River Charles

The River Charles

Brackishly
she leaves, yet still remains,
motionless in movements rhapsody

timeless witness to a revolutions birthing
a tender refuge in the heart of city life.

Water to assuage new freedoms fire
esplanade, overtures
The River Charles


for Andrea Dietrich contest
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Faye Gibson June 16, 2014 at 9:11 PM Really like this, John. Water to assuage new freedoms fire... Congratulations. John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:49 PM Thank you Faye. At many levels the "revolution" continues.

Sara Kendrick June 16, 2014 at 11:40 AM I may copy and paste congrats but I have read your work and find it of exceptional quality. Sara John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:42 PM Sara, an honor to have you cut and paste my poem and thank you for your kind comment.

Carolyn Devonshire June 15, 2014 at 6:57 PM Dear John, I love the way you capture the historical events this river has witnessed. A magnificent write. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:45 PM Thank you Carolyn

Joyce Johnson June 15, 2014 at 3:29 PM I agree this could have been much higher were it not for the syllable slip. Congratulations. Love, Joyce John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:43 PM Alas I often write better than I count. Thank you Joyce for your support and comments.

Paul Callus June 15, 2014 at 7:55 AM A beautiful write which could easily have placed higher, John. Congrats on your win. // paul

Joseph May June 15, 2014 at 6:35 AM Congrats on a fine win John John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:47 PM Joseph, thanks for checking in again, appreciate the comments.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 15, 2014 at 5:46 AM John that's a wonderful poem indeed ! Congrats on great win ! John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:41 PM Thanks for your support.

Dr.Ram Mehta June 15, 2014 at 1:34 AM Fine choice of the water of the body and fine win. Congrats, John John Lawless June 17, 2014 at 3:40 PM easy choice, I spend countless hours on the river fishing and kayaking

Andrea Dietrich June 15, 2014 at 1:09 AM Dang, another one that was so good but I put an HM for using too many syllables in your last line. The title and last line were to be only three syllables. I wonder. could you have said Charles River?? Anyway, congrats and thanks for trying this form. John Lawless June 15, 2014 at 8:14 AM Alas Andrea, my mistake is the result of my fishing buddy who always announces, Jacques Cousteau like, as we enter the river: "Phillippe and I will now enter The River Charles in search of the elusive Boston Bass". Appreciate the placement in spite of my error. John

Joseph May May 31, 2014 at 10:41 PM Great write John...I like the 2nd line...best wishe in the contest