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The Real Feel

Birds trilling, its 5am.' Days end move, decided Grit despises.) Fear inside. Strength..' Calls for the testing Many demands.. Unseen awaits..!

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Skat A

Date: 10/8/2015 5:16:00 PM

Joe, This is a good poem I love how its been written about a wake-up call. Love SKAT

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 4/29/2015 9:00:00 AM

A well planned open ended write. Good onya.

Joe Maverick
Date: 4/30/2015 2:16:00 PM

Thank you for looking me up Scott, hope all is well there..'

Funom Makama

Date: 3/26/2015 12:37:00 PM

This is a well thought piece, showcasing the tender make up of your soul and the immense creativity, so rich in your mind. I so love this and thanks a lot for sharing..

Jack Horne

Date: 10/15/2014 1:56:00 PM

yes, such truth here, my friend. Very sorry to hear of your bereavement, Joe.

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/29/2014 6:51:00 AM

Unseen awaits, so true Joe.. Awesome Tanka.. Hope your week has been good thus far :)

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/20/2014 10:58:00 PM

Nice use of this Asian form! Keep it up! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Jack Horne

Date: 5/5/2014 10:11:00 AM

very well written, Joe. Hope you are feeling well and having a great week

Don Johnson

Date: 4/27/2014 7:30:00 PM

some truth in the great religions of the world, obscured by the veiled references to fact, re written in time did detract, by omission...perhaps ... entertaining poetry here ol mate!!! be well and contented

Don Johnson

Date: 4/27/2014 6:29:00 PM

the uncertain possibilitys of life in the fast lane ::} great poetry mate!!! Re: The Spirit Animal combination. The predator animal some humans descend from in the body type will kill in passion or anger or for fun? The spirit in the body tries to stop this happening as it the spirit knows it will have to return to a lower worse level in little Hell Earth, to suffer for the spirit weakness in controlling the animal lust in the adopted beast, man. So the strong moral spirit subjugates the normal tempered beast with some difficulty, but the caged beast waits to pounce on its prey. Hence a possible murderer waits his chance to overpower the weakling spirit, to do his instinct thing of the animal world quite naturally? Don Johnson

Daver Austin

Date: 4/22/2014 10:19:00 AM

An unusual Tanka. Seeding a day such as this Tanka suggests is also unusual. Good stuff, Joe, and thanks for reading my stuff. My eyes are so bad that I can't spend much time at the computer. Love, daver

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/18/2014 2:12:00 PM

Life is surely uncertain..We never know what will happen in this life..Enjoyed reading your creative work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/17/2014 10:42:00 PM

The part that struck me in this one is the third line. I never used to feel fear upon waking. Maybe I am "catching" the anxiety of my husband's, but often I wake up with a most fearful feeling in the pit of my stomach. So much uncertainty in the world today and in my life. I hope I caught at least part of your meaning, Joe, and thanks for your comment on my antique poem. You are so right about that.

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/14/2014 4:56:00 PM

Amazing tanka,,,i read this which relates to my own situation of getting older and older. yes Unseen awaits alright no doubt about that....best tanka i have seen in a long while thanks Joe,

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/29/2014 1:45:00 PM

Dear Joe, love the way the birds wake you up. Each morning I spend a few moments lying still, wondering what the day will bring. Indeed, the "unseen" awaits! Well done, my friend. Love, Carolyn

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 3/27/2014 8:40:00 AM

This is an awesome Tanka. I had to read it a couple of times to get the meaning. Very nice!