The Raven Part of Me

----- ………………….. Treading on broken glass intoxicated and splintered By exciting dangers as call of the wild littered; My mind seduced by sly games uncontrolled Feeding insatiable urges more than life could behold, Until I collapsed, succumbing to black heat Charred , burned from slits of fevered beat. Then , a glint of light where reborn eyes pranced Are where hopes begged for a winged chance, My spine bent to a shape deeply shaded white As if to say, damn! Put your act together and do it right; While from afar, *Angels descending, bring from above, Chiming blurred *echoes of mercy, whispers of love* And in that moment, the raven part of me led to slaughter Tipping my choices to bathe on cleansed waters © …….. .. . . . .. . To Hell and Back for PD's Contest By: nette onclaud
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Brown Avatar
August 9, 2012 at 11:39 AM
Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "To Hell And Back" contest Nette. Love, Carol
Williams Avatar
August 5, 2012 at 1:28 PM
Nette, congrats on your win, just excellent...David
Rozario Avatar
August 5, 2012 at 8:34 AM
Congrats on your wonderful win Nette
A   Avatar
August 4, 2012 at 8:37 PM
NETTE :-) , this has been my favorite contest out of all the ones I have sponsored this year.. Congratulations and thank you for the double journey... good night... XOX~ PD
Brown Avatar
February 21, 2012 at 6:04 AM
Congratulations on your win in ~Tracie's~ "Fallen Angel" contest Nette. Love, Carol
Bunton Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 3:08 PM
congratulations!
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 12:58 PM
Congrats on your awesome win! Love the last two lines...a perfect conclusion. Blessings, Rhonda
Poet Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 11:48 AM
Congrats Nette on your another Top win.Loved it first time around.
Ronthorpe Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 11:11 AM
Wonderful set of Couplets. Excellent job, as usual. Congrats for placing on Tracie's winners list....................S.Ronthorpe
Minardi Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 7:58 AM
Congrats Nette!!!
Sweetheart Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 7:15 AM
congrats Nette luv on an amazing win for these vibrant words on fallen Angels luv.. think u know I collect the, and have over 3000 at home in NJ..here I view one rare beauty playing a golden harp .. as lovely as this write luv..
Sweetheart Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 7:15 AM
soup mail in a few ..
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
February 19, 2012 at 6:06 AM
Congratulations a smashing write a deserving win xx
Ball Avatar
February 15, 2012 at 5:40 PM
Excellent Nette. This speaks of the naive being seduced but once this person sees the darkness and recognizes it for what it is she/he turns from it walks toward the light. Super job. God Bless, JB
Minardi Avatar
February 15, 2012 at 9:44 AM
This is very poetic, Nette. And the ending? Marvelous :) Huggss back at you and big winning wishes.
Babcock Avatar
February 14, 2012 at 8:33 AM
Fantastic poem and good luck in the contest. Happy Valentine's day. Nice that you received some roses. Lucky lady. Have an awesome day love phyl
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February 13, 2012 at 8:42 PM
Last two lines concluded well, a fantastic poem read like a winner. Best wishes to you for the contest, loved always, bl
Dietrich Avatar
February 13, 2012 at 8:20 AM
I love how you ended this: to bathe on cleansed waters. REdemption for the angel!! Sure to do well in the contest. Luv, Andrea
B Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 5:27 PM
A grim tale of a beautiful redemption, well done, a fine yarn full of rich metaphors and vivid imagery. I love the vocabulary, just love it, great job Miss Nette! Good luck in the contest.
Johnson Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 4:22 PM
like the flow its excellent, tells a story twisted bent, very good my sweet dark nette, good 4 contest is my bet, raven-nette.....:)
Wilson Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 3:40 PM
just beautifully written Nette! Best of luck to you although you don't need luck with this gem...love,Deb
Kendrick Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 12:44 PM
Reads like a winner..Very creative use of the idea presented for you to use for your work..Amazing the different ideas that have come forward..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara
Sivey Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 11:28 AM
Wow, what a gorgeous write my friend! This poem brings out completely the fallen angel! "...to bathe on cleansed waters" is a solid foundation to work on! I loved your write a lot this afternoon!! Incredible Work!!
Sweetheart Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 9:14 AM
a superb creation Nette luv.. have been there myself and felt like a fallen angel at times with this scenario u so perfectly rhymed and timed with grace.. good luck in contest.. glad I added another verse ..went back to checkj rules and saw I could luv.. thankxxx..
Poet Avatar
February 12, 2012 at 8:36 AM
Hey it is 9 PM here...tomorrow Math....studying.......
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