Carrie Richards Poet Free verse

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The Rabbit and the Fox

I crouched behind the tall grass growing
Spied a sly fox galloping towards me
With rapid breath, his ears held high
A hanging tongue, red eyes were glowing
He was hunting....he was wry
I watched him hunt, ...in tall grass growing

I knelt behind the tall grass growing
Saw the rabbit cower lowly
Looking for a rabbit hole
A place to scurry....he must hurry
A rabbit bracing,...hearts were pacing
My own heart was pounding, racing

I hid behind the tall grass growing
Watched the sly fox snatch the rabbit
A witness to the course of nature
I felt the darkness cloud the picture
Overcome by grief and sadness
I sat upon the tall grass growing

I stood up in the tall grass growing
Knowing of the force of nature
I must leave now.....I will grieve now........somehow my own tears are flowing





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Contest The Rabbit and The Fox (Inner animal)
Resubmitted and revised for PD's 100 in a ROW contest -- 17

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Teddy Kimathi October 7, 2016 at 7:20 AM Congrats Carrie, for your top placement with this captivating piece!!! ;-)

Joanna Daniel October 6, 2016 at 7:32 AM Such a beautiful write with lovely imagery, Carrie:) congratulations on your win:)

Poet Destroyer A October 5, 2016 at 11:25 AM Hi Carrie, I had to go with BEST imagery here... Very good, :), Congratulations on your awesome placement. Stop by and enjoy my latest blog "from my pen" if you'd like. SMILES ~LINDA~

Skat A May 31, 2011 at 11:41 PM congrats on your awesome contest entry luv*Skat

Joe Maverick May 31, 2011 at 5:00 PM Congrats Carrie, good to see the win here in P D's contest!

Carol Sunshine Brown May 31, 2011 at 7:02 AM Congratulations on your placement in P.D's contest Carrie. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart May 30, 2011 at 8:22 PM Congrats Carrie on another great win in P.D.'s contest with this great write on her fabulous mystique.. enjoy ...

Nette Onclaud May 30, 2011 at 8:08 PM oh, a different POV, carrie.. super cheers for the fine spot! :) huggs

Shani Fassbender May 30, 2011 at 6:40 PM Carrie, reading this I find myself holding my breath...your words put me "right there"...amazing write! Love, Shani

Dr.Ram Mehta May 30, 2011 at 5:50 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of p.d., Carrie

Dr.Ram Mehta May 30, 2011 at 5:50 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of p.d., Carrie

L'Nass Shango December 31, 2010 at 7:49 AM "Nature red in tooth and claw" does not often meet our expectation of natural justice, but the creative way you critiqued it reminds me why of old you are one of my favorite poets. I love this write, it was pure art. Happy New Year, Carrie, it was nice hearing from you marvelous friend.

Michael Jordan December 30, 2010 at 3:55 PM Hi Neighbor - Awh that was a very tender poem Carrie. Nature is both a very beautiful and tragic. The circle of life must end for one in order for the other to survive. I hope you had a Merry Christmas and that the coming year has many blessings for you, mj

Sara Kendrick December 30, 2010 at 2:06 PM This one grabbed my attenttion and held it..I was allured by the story line..It ended different from what I expected..Good luck in the contest with this great work..Your presence at my blog lifted my spirits..I have heard from him again..Phyllis called about four as she was leaving Atlanta..She said Physical Therapy had him up in a chair..He had hit the pain button about three times and was more comfortable than he had been...Sara

Carolyn Devonshire December 30, 2010 at 8:33 AM Nature can fill us with both beauty and sadness. It is just the fox's way to survive by attacking the rabbit. It was gripping to view this through your words, Carrie. Forgive me for not reading more; I've got the flu and it's been keeping me in bed. Love, Carolyn

Ravindra K Kapoor December 30, 2010 at 5:52 AM Outstandingly beautiful with all the thrills of a lovely drama. You have sketched a scene so amazing and full of colors that the reader feels as if, he is watching the game of the Fox and the Rabbit in reality. Great write. The end of the Poem again gives a shock and thrill so true and so wonderful. Thanks for such a lovely write. I have placed a new Poem 'Rain, the Story'. Hope you would enjoy it. With all the best wishes for a Happy New Year 2011 with love ....Ravindra... Carrie Richards

Carol Sunshine Brown December 30, 2010 at 4:25 AM I enjoyed reading your outstanding poetry this morning Carrie. I will be back after the New Year to read more of your poetry. Wishing you a very Happy New Year. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A December 30, 2010 at 2:29 AM you see Carrie,, i was not trying to read yet... lol.. Thanks for this wonderful entry. The only thing wrong with this poem is the title.. After the contest you are welcome to change the wonderful title you gave it... I did enjoy,, Now this is a painful ballad, but I love it.. reads perfect.. love the emotions at the end... thanks,..p.d.

Dr Hitendra Mehta December 29, 2010 at 7:58 PM Carrie - You seem to have hunted big win in PD's contest with this vivid narrative. Best luck in contest. Thnx for liking my work"Silence not just opposite of Voice" Happy New year to you & your family. Luv/best wishes.....Hitendra Mehta

John Rhinem December 29, 2010 at 6:14 PM Ps. Smile ~ I wished to stop back by my dear to let "Your Wonders" know that, "Yes," this is an Absolute fave; just like "You!?":) ~

John Rhinem December 29, 2010 at 5:38 PM Smile ~ It they've been neutered and then, their Balls swell, unto equal portions as that of their peanut sized brains; along with their sly fox like, .... ? .... ~ Smile, "Thanks For, 'The Laughs My Dear, Precious & Priceless Carrie Richards!!!'" ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love, 'Forevermore,'" John! ~ Smile, "Sweet Dreams;" Bye!:) ~

John Rhinem December 29, 2010 at 5:32 PM Smile! ~ Wow, this is like super dramatic; kind of like a suspense drama or a thriller perhaps?! ~ But, at least "Your Beauty" isn't talking about bugs and insects so, I would say that, That, Is, a small step for science and, a Giant leap for, All of Humankind ~ "Smile" ~ "Ow," how "You" astonish myself; simply, "Amazing!?". ~ Poor little rabbit but, I have heard that in some parts of the universe, They, can grow up unto, say, "50" feet tall; especially ~ .... Cont:)