The Pine Tree

the tallest I’ve ever seen was in primary
towering like a General in the military
a haggard expression of pain and disgust
the needle like leaves his ooze would discard
he seemed so staunch in his camouflage and upright salute
the pinecones resembling a grenade assault 
as curious children do, to climb we were too eager
mystery lay hidden somewhere in his evergreen erect figure
the teacher would soon be called to the rescue
climbing down now an impossible chore
some disciplinary action would be enforced
he wouldn't even be swaying in the wind this unmoveable force
then one day the war would finally be won
it took a couple of grades of broken bones and casting stones 
high up in his clutches where our balls would be stuck
he would be uprooted and loaded onto the back of the truck
but when he left, the school grounds seemed so empty
he had retired after generations serving this country
that's why it now felt like such a pyrrhic victory
in hindsight, he was truly our sentry




08-23-2015

Contest: Charlotte Jade Puddifoot's Trees Personified

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 8/23/2015 1:47:00 PM
wonderful memories and lovely personification good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx 7
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 8/23/2015 1:55:00 PM
Thanks a mil Jan...it's a work in progress (:heers, Tbang
Date: 8/23/2015 10:37:00 AM
oh my gosh, this is BRILLIANT personification. What a clever idea. I am going to FAVE this one!!
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Date: 8/23/2015 11:05:00 AM
Hi Andrea...many thanks, still a bit rough though...still needs some refining (:heers, Tbang
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