Aditi Mishra Poet Pantoum

The Perpetual Voyage

I dream of a lost abandoned place,
Ah! That evanescent paradise,
The fervent wind takes an eager pace,
My naive heart frets of velvet vice.

Ah! That evanescent paradise,
The road leads me to a vintage town,
My naive heart frets of velvet vice,
Alluring caricatures in brown.

The road leads me to a vintage town,
Frayed memories remind me to stay,
Alluring caricatures in brown,
My voyage blends me to float away.

Frayed memories remind me to stay,
The fervent wind takes an eager pace,
My voyage blends me to float away,
I dream of a lost abandoned place.

May 10, 2020
Used Image 2
For Pantoum Rhyme and Personification Poetry Contest
Sponsored By: Eve Roper
Used 9 syllables per line
~Winner: Honorable Mention

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James Inman June 19, 2020 at 9:20 AM Wonderful imagery, we all have our favorite forms to write in but I love seeing the diversity in writing. A lovely Pantoum. Aditi Mishra June 20, 2020 at 12:13 PM I am glad you loved this James. Thank you for your kind visit to my poems and for your appreciating words. It really means a lot to me :)

Eve Roper June 14, 2020 at 5:00 PM Aditi, The Perpetual Voyage, was an enjoyable write it has perfect rhyme, flow, and syllable count. Thank you for entering my contest. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve Aditi Mishra June 15, 2020 at 9:06 AM Glad you loved my work Eve. Thank you for my placement in your contest and for your wonderful appreciation. Much love and blessings :)

Line Gauthier May 21, 2020 at 12:36 AM Lovely, Aditi. Aditi Mishra May 21, 2020 at 1:37 AM Thanks for the appreciation Line :)

John Watt May 18, 2020 at 11:55 PM Such exquisite phrases, my friend: "evanescent paradise", "velvet vice", "alluring caricatures", "the fervent wind". These are perfect for a pantoum, rondeau, kyrielle, quatern, and any poem that features repeating lines, because the reader is pleased to see these wonderful phrases appear again! It is true in life that the wanderer dreams of settling down, and the settled down dream of wandering! The important thing is that we forget not our dreams, nor why we dreamed them in the first place! Aditi Mishra May 19, 2020 at 6:13 AM Thank you for giving an insight into the construction of poetry dear friend. Your words are always a source of motivation and knowledge and inspire me to write more often. I agree that remembering our dreams is the most important thing to keep going no matter what the reasons or obstacles might be. Thsnk you for your kind words. God bless you John :)