Andrea Dietrich Poet Quatrain

The Perfect Woman

She sewed and worked a garden,
did the dishes all by hand;
her wiggling giggling kids
would straighten up at her command.

Her leftovers were loved as much
as was the chocolate cake
she drizzled with that special sauce
she always used to make.

Today they’d call her backwards,
but we knew perfectly
that all SHE’D ever wanted 
Was what she came to be.

By Andrea Dietrich

For Michael Smith's THE PERFECT WOMAN Poetry contest

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Richard D Seal April 24, 2013 at 7:51 AM Social and economic pressure have almost taken away this way of life. I love to see women getting on in the world but I'm sure many would be happy to be this perfect lady. An astute write Andrea, lovingly told. Take care, Richard

Phyllis Babcock March 1, 2013 at 10:25 AM If you are happy doing what you love you should never care if someone calls you backward. Nicely said on this poem. love phyl

Cecilia Macfarlane February 15, 2013 at 6:49 PM Beautiful write Andrea....a perfect woman is one that is comfortable in their own skin, you stated that perfectly here! Hugs

Heather Ober February 15, 2013 at 8:46 AM This is wonderful! I can't sew and I always kill plants no matter how hard I try not to... I am most certainly not the perfect woman. BUT I CAN bake :) Great entry! (Especially loved the "wiggling giggling kids.")

Joseph May February 15, 2013 at 6:51 AM a lovely tribute to women of generations past....best wishes

Ndaba Sibanda February 15, 2013 at 1:15 AM A bold and honest poem. Great.

Tim Ryerson February 14, 2013 at 4:55 PM Oh for those days gone by!...This reminds me so much of both my grandma's...It seemed all they did was cook and they ALWAYS had food on the table and would be insulted if you didn't eat...Nice memories my friend - Tim

Debbie Duncan February 14, 2013 at 11:07 AM I think you are writing about my mama ;} I remember those day's well;} very good one. the old one is ' the wind is Calling" from 1972 ,,, Happy Valentine's day Andrea ;}

Isaiah Zerbst February 14, 2013 at 10:43 AM Very good! The form is well suited to the poem. It sounds like a simple life and a wonderful mother. So wonderful that she was able to fulfill her dream.

Kash Poet February 14, 2013 at 6:31 AM How beautifully you ave penned a story in this 3 stanzas.I feel 12 lines is too short to write on this topic.

Sukmawati Komala February 13, 2013 at 5:23 PM Thank you sweetheart Andrea... for sharing your Perfect write... as you are my perfect writter... <3 <3 <3 luv and hugs Sk :) happy Valentine :)

Richard Lamoureux February 13, 2013 at 3:34 PM Well done, she would definately qualify for membership in my Perfect Womens club. If you have a chance read my other poem Perfect woman, it is the one I entered. The second one was additional inspiration for a great topic.

Russell Sivey February 13, 2013 at 3:16 PM This is a tremendously beautiful write my friend! I couldn't imagine a much better poem for this contest, you are quite good at these contests Andrea! For that matter you are a brilliant poetess, I love reading all your works! What a gorgeous piece you've written here, Great Job!!

Gwendolen Song February 13, 2013 at 2:34 PM Andrea, now now now,,,,before u write a poem about me, shouldn't u ask for permission?...hahha....love the chocolate cake analogy...awesome and inspiring write to spur all moms along! gwendolen

Harry Horsman February 13, 2013 at 1:49 PM wonderful perfect woman, written by the perfect poet...

Holly Moore February 13, 2013 at 1:02 PM I have a friend who just wanted to become a mother. She home schools her children and everything. I love your piece! Thanks for the kind comments on my poem "A Kiss Upon Your Cheek."....xx Holly

Colleen Bono February 13, 2013 at 12:53 PM Its been awhile.posted a few new ones.Just trying to survive this cruel world.Hope life is good for you and loved ones.take care.

David Williams February 13, 2013 at 12:23 PM Andrea a wonderful write, good picture and good luck...David

Donna Jones February 13, 2013 at 11:11 AM Very nice..good luck in the contest

Black Eyed Susan February 13, 2013 at 8:18 AM very nice - sounds like she was a good mother and happy too - love the ending :)

Jack Horne February 13, 2013 at 7:50 AM love this tender write, my friend. Congrats on all your wins : )