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The Parting

Betrayed by lies. Dismayed she cries. Misplayed she tries to apologize. Unmade he sighs. Unswayed his eyes display no surprise, only good-byes.

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Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 1/19/2014 4:05:00 PM

Love this tight poem, the form adds to the feeling of a short term relationship.

Gary Watkins
Date: 2/22/2014 11:26:00 PM

I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier. Somehow I missed this update. I'm glad you liked the poem. I tried to convey the tense awkwardness of the situation with the short lines.

Donna Jones

Date: 12/12/2013 4:30:00 PM

Saw your reply below...hopefully these young people learn early...honesty is the most important thing in a relationship...enjoyed this...

Gary Watkins
Date: 12/12/2013 4:49:00 PM

Yep. It always galled me how the boy in the relationship would treat the girl badly (being with other girls, talking down to her, etc) and the girl usually thought she did something wrong to deserve it!

Joseph Sergi

Date: 12/11/2013 6:06:00 PM

"Parting is such sweet sorrow" nice write Gary.

Gary Watkins
Date: 12/11/2013 6:20:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. As a middle school teacher, I saw this thing play out too many times.