Gregory Richard Barden Poet Couplet

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The Packing of a Suitcase

Thus packed, my simple case

               What love, lost, does displace


Clothes and dreams and needs

               The waste of passion's deeds


And folded with my shirts

               The remnants of your hurts


Still left, such ample room

               (Enough to be my tomb)


Though it can never hold

               My tattered heart ... now cold.




~ 2nd Place ~  in the "It's A Shorty" Poetry Contest, Deborah Guenther Beachboard, Sponsor.

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Barbara Barry-Nishanian April 20, 2018 at 11:11 PM "Remnants of your hurts" were folded . in with shirts.......Break our hearts will you?Congrats . on something more than just touching and lovely...WOW! Gregory Richard Barden April 20, 2018 at 11:46 PM That's so very sweet of you, Barbara - I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3

Sandra Haight April 4, 2018 at 6:50 PM Gregory, congratulations on another fine win for this outstanding poem! Sandra Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:57 PM That's very sweet of you, Sandra, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it - thank you, Dear Friend! :-) <3

Gershon Wolf April 4, 2018 at 10:46 AM It's the Wolf returning with congrats on a well-deserved win. Best always, my friend. :) gw Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:55 PM Blessings and thanks to you as always, my good friend - so appreciated! :-)

Susan Gentry April 3, 2018 at 9:20 PM Congratulations on your win with this sad, could feel the hurt poem. The style is excellent and made it more powerful. I like it. Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:54 PM Thank you so very much, Susan, I'm pleased you enjoyed this one - it is special to me! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Eve Roper April 3, 2018 at 8:43 PM Congratulations on your win, Greg, excellent write. Hugs Eve ~`* Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:53 PM Very sweet of you, Eve, thank you very much! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy April 3, 2018 at 4:07 PM Congratulations again on a much- deserved win! Janice Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:53 PM Thank you very much, Janice - you are so kind! :-) <3

Jan Allison April 3, 2018 at 3:53 PM very moving poem Greg many congrats on your contest wins:-) hugs Jan xx Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:53 PM That's very kind of you, Jan, thank you so much! :-) <3

Line Gauthier April 3, 2018 at 3:34 PM Back with more congrats, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:52 PM Many thanks, Line!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 3, 2018 at 2:18 PM Poignant eloquent piece Greg, wonderful poetry. Congratulations on your win! xomo <3 Gregory Richard Barden April 4, 2018 at 6:52 PM Thanks so much, Mo - so appreciated! :-) <3

Beautiful Scars March 21, 2018 at 6:26 AM beautifully expressed sweet man :) thank you and congrats :)-luloo Gregory Richard Barden March 22, 2018 at 2:57 AM Thank you so kindly, Luloo, I'm so pleased you found my entry worthy of such placement, and on a list with such amazing poets! I am honored and humbled ... blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy March 20, 2018 at 8:54 PM So lovely, so sad. CONGRATS, Greg! Janice Gregory Richard Barden March 22, 2018 at 2:54 AM Thank you very much, Janice ...blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Line Gauthier March 20, 2018 at 7:34 PM Back with most deserving congrats, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden March 22, 2018 at 2:52 AM Thank you so much, Line! :-) <3

Sandra Haight March 20, 2018 at 7:28 PM So much emotion and hurt packed into a fine selection of just a few words, Gregory. Gave me goosebumps... Congratulations on your Podium win on this short list of winners. Sandra Gregory Richard Barden March 22, 2018 at 2:52 AM That's very sweet of you, Sandra, thank you so much ... I try very hard to maximize meaning and minimize word quantity, and it means a lot that someone notices, especially such a fine poet as you! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3

Gershon Wolf March 20, 2018 at 6:17 PM The epitome of 'starkness,' a black-and-white nail hammered into a suitcase of sorrow: Congrats on your winner, Gregory. It's a poem to read, contemplate, and read again...and again. Bravo! Best wishes, Gershon Gregory Richard Barden March 22, 2018 at 2:50 AM Many kind thanks to you, Gershon, I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Blessings, Friend! :-)

Nette Onclaud March 20, 2018 at 1:44 PM riveting mood and language... well done, greg!..huggs Gregory Richard Barden March 22, 2018 at 2:49 AM Thank you so much, Nette - blessings, my friend! :-)

Line Gauthier March 19, 2018 at 9:46 PM Stunning poem, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden March 20, 2018 at 9:30 AM Very kind of you, Line - thanks! :-)

Kim Rodrigues March 19, 2018 at 9:03 PM Each couplet a nail! Great! GL in contest! Gregory Richard Barden March 20, 2018 at 9:30 AM Thanks so much, Kim! :-) <3