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The Packing of a Suitcase

Thus packed, my simple case

               What love, lost, does displace


Clothes and dreams and needs

               The waste of passion's deeds


And folded with my shirts

               The remnants of your hurts


Still left, such ample room

               (Enough to be my tomb)


Though it can never hold

               My tattered heart ... now cold.




~ 2nd Place ~  in the "It's A Shorty" Poetry Contest, Deborah Guenther Beachboard, Sponsor.

Copyright © Gregory Richard Barden | Year Posted 2018

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Barbara Barry-Nishanian Date: 4/20/2018 11:11:00 PM "Remnants of your hurts" were folded . in with shirts.......Break our hearts will you?Congrats . on something more than just touching and lovely...WOW! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/20/2018 11:46:00 PM That's so very sweet of you, Barbara - I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3

Sandra Haight Date: 4/4/2018 6:50:00 PM Gregory, congratulations on another fine win for this outstanding poem! Sandra Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:57:00 PM That's very sweet of you, Sandra, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it - thank you, Dear Friend! :-) <3

Gershon Wolf Date: 4/4/2018 10:46:00 AM It's the Wolf returning with congrats on a well-deserved win. Best always, my friend. :) gw Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:55:00 PM Blessings and thanks to you as always, my good friend - so appreciated! :-)

Susan Gentry Date: 4/3/2018 9:20:00 PM Congratulations on your win with this sad, could feel the hurt poem. The style is excellent and made it more powerful. I like it. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:54:00 PM Thank you so very much, Susan, I'm pleased you enjoyed this one - it is special to me! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Eve Roper Date: 4/3/2018 8:43:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Greg, excellent write. Hugs Eve ~`* Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:53:00 PM Very sweet of you, Eve, thank you very much! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy Date: 4/3/2018 4:07:00 PM Congratulations again on a much- deserved win! Janice Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:53:00 PM Thank you very much, Janice - you are so kind! :-) <3

Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2018 3:53:00 PM very moving poem Greg many congrats on your contest wins:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:53:00 PM That's very kind of you, Jan, thank you so much! :-) <3

Line Gauthier Date: 4/3/2018 3:34:00 PM Back with more congrats, Gregory. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:52:00 PM Many thanks, Line!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 4/3/2018 2:18:00 PM Poignant eloquent piece Greg, wonderful poetry. Congratulations on your win! xomo <3 Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 4/4/2018 6:52:00 PM Thanks so much, Mo - so appreciated! :-) <3

Beautiful Scars Date: 3/21/2018 6:26:00 AM beautifully expressed sweet man :) thank you and congrats :)-luloo Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/22/2018 2:57:00 AM Thank you so kindly, Luloo, I'm so pleased you found my entry worthy of such placement, and on a list with such amazing poets! I am honored and humbled ... blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy Date: 3/20/2018 8:54:00 PM So lovely, so sad. CONGRATS, Greg! Janice Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/22/2018 2:54:00 AM Thank you very much, Janice ...blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Line Gauthier Date: 3/20/2018 7:34:00 PM Back with most deserving congrats, Gregory. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/22/2018 2:52:00 AM Thank you so much, Line! :-) <3

Sandra Haight Date: 3/20/2018 7:28:00 PM So much emotion and hurt packed into a fine selection of just a few words, Gregory. Gave me goosebumps... Congratulations on your Podium win on this short list of winners. Sandra Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/22/2018 2:52:00 AM That's very sweet of you, Sandra, thank you so much ... I try very hard to maximize meaning and minimize word quantity, and it means a lot that someone notices, especially such a fine poet as you! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3

Gershon Wolf Date: 3/20/2018 6:17:00 PM The epitome of 'starkness,' a black-and-white nail hammered into a suitcase of sorrow: Congrats on your winner, Gregory. It's a poem to read, contemplate, and read again...and again. Bravo! Best wishes, Gershon Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/22/2018 2:50:00 AM Many kind thanks to you, Gershon, I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Blessings, Friend! :-)

Nette Onclaud Date: 3/20/2018 1:44:00 PM riveting mood and language... well done, greg!..huggs Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/22/2018 2:49:00 AM Thank you so much, Nette - blessings, my friend! :-)

Line Gauthier Date: 3/19/2018 9:46:00 PM Stunning poem, Gregory. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/20/2018 9:30:00 AM Very kind of you, Line - thanks! :-)

Kim Rodrigues Date: 3/19/2018 9:03:00 PM Each couplet a nail! Great! GL in contest! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/20/2018 9:30:00 AM Thanks so much, Kim! :-) <3