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The Outcome

purple tulips, the color of her toddler dress.
the leafy stems, her eyes.
the baby-blond hair, mom combs into a crest,
the sea will satisfy.

blond slowly turns brunette, tumbles
from Rapunzel’s tower, then gets shorn.

green waters, a dry oasis —
cerulean blue boundary.
open sesame with artificial drops.

wrinkle-protected eyes.
ears can’t hear what others say.
deaf and blindness make her appear wise.

guttural sounds - huh, eh, hmm.
smiles and nods as the tongues of the young,
like trumpets in her ear, elucidate their troubles.

she’s ironed out hers. they still exist.
still, she knows the outcome.

sediment of the sea shelled out to the deep.
sand sifts through her fingers.

sandcastles wash out, but i see
children carrying shovels and pails.
some have leafy-stem eyes and baby-blond hair.

3/6/2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021


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Date: 3/9/2021 10:01:00 AM
Ah, so poignant and beautifully penned! "wrinkle-protected eyes. ears can’t hear what others say. deaf and blindness make her appear wise. " Bravo!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/9/2021 1:41:00 PM
Thank you! So glad you liked it!
Date: 3/7/2021 7:42:00 AM
The different levels at which you write about are predominantly captured by the sound and image of children with their leafy-stem eyes and baby blond hair whose sand castles wash out, but which only she, with her wrinkle protected eyes, can see. Hugs and kisses, Jennifer.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/7/2021 9:40:00 AM
So glad you captured many images projected in this poem! xxoo
Date: 3/6/2021 8:36:00 PM
So many levels and layers to this 'innocent' castle by the sea, Kim. Kudos, Gershon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/7/2021 9:40:00 AM
Thank you, my dear friend!
Date: 3/6/2021 8:43:00 AM
Your imagery excels and asks to be read again.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2021 2:32:00 PM
Thank you so much! :)
Date: 3/6/2021 8:13:00 AM
Beautiful images at play in this poem, Kim. I hear the children in every verse.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2021 2:32:00 PM
Thank you, dear friend!
Date: 3/6/2021 6:35:00 AM
WOW... this is Amazing!!! I love and am faving ... It's a great write. Love to you and blessings too, Love, Gina
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2021 2:33:00 PM
Thank you so much! With love...Kim
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