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The Outcome

purple tulips, the color of her toddler dress.
the leafy stems, her eyes.
the baby-blond hair, mom combs into a crest,
the sea will satisfy.

blond slowly turns brunette, tumbles
from Rapunzel’s tower, then gets shorn.

green waters, a dry oasis —
cerulean blue boundary.
open sesame with artificial drops.

wrinkle-protected eyes.
ears can’t hear what others say.
deaf and blindness make her appear wise.

guttural sounds - huh, eh, hmm.
smiles and nods as the tongues of the young,
like trumpets in her ear, elucidate their troubles.

she’s ironed out hers. they still exist.
still, she knows the outcome.

sediment of the sea shelled out to the deep.
sand sifts through her fingers.

sandcastles wash out, but i see
children carrying shovels and pails.
some have leafy-stem eyes and baby-blond hair.

3/6/2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Krutsinger Avatar
March 9, 2021 at 10:01 AM
Ah, so poignant and beautifully penned! "wrinkle-protected eyes. ears can’t hear what others say. deaf and blindness make her appear wise. " Bravo!
Rodrigues Avatar
March 9, 2021 at 1:41 PM
Thank you! So glad you liked it!
Proxenos Avatar
March 7, 2021 at 7:42 AM
The different levels at which you write about are predominantly captured by the sound and image of children with their leafy-stem eyes and baby blond hair whose sand castles wash out, but which only she, with her wrinkle protected eyes, can see. Hugs and kisses, Jennifer.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 7, 2021 at 9:40 AM
So glad you captured many images projected in this poem! xxoo
Wolf Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 8:36 PM
So many levels and layers to this 'innocent' castle by the sea, Kim. Kudos, Gershon
Rodrigues Avatar
March 7, 2021 at 9:40 AM
Thank you, my dear friend!
Buhagiar Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 8:43 AM
Your imagery excels and asks to be read again.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 2:32 PM
Thank you so much! :)
Pandit Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 8:13 AM
Beautiful images at play in this poem, Kim. I hear the children in every verse.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 2:32 PM
Thank you, dear friend!
Mcintosh Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 6:35 AM
WOW... this is Amazing!!! I love and am faving ... It's a great write. Love to you and blessings too, Love, Gina
Rodrigues Avatar
March 6, 2021 at 2:33 PM
Thank you so much! With love...Kim
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