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The Other Side

In vile defeat I confided to helplessness
I cringed knowing I know so little
As inadequate as I am I felt responsible 
I felt responsible to know everything

In this mentality I suffered long nights
Over thinking myself and overlooking life
Until I gave up the pain for a little while
And took a deep, dark look to the other side

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Justin Bordner Date: 9/23/2014 1:08:00 AM This poem has heavy, profound paradox that really forces me to not only reexamine my own experiences but to scrutinize the meaning of knowledge and responsibility. In academic philosophy this discipline is call Epistemology Laura. To be responsible without knowledge, the collapse of innocence. " Overthinking myself and overlooking life..." The other side, trusting a new face. I admire the deep quality of introspection in the write Laura...J.A.B. Login to Reply Laura Breidenthal Date: 9/23/2014 2:07:00 AM Thanks for exploring my older works Justin.. this one means a lot to me... ~Laura

Jerry T Curtis Date: 3/21/2014 8:44:00 PM Very deep and penetrating, Laura , I wish everyone could read this , to know They are not alone Login to Reply

Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/20/2013 6:47:00 AM This poem totally resonated with me and I identified with everything you were conveying. This is going into my "faves" because it's just that good. Fantastic poem, Laura :) Login to Reply

Kj Force Date: 10/22/2013 8:22:00 PM Loved the depth of which you wrote... and the awesome words of quote. You paint such great pictures with your words...enjoyed and sharing...kjforce Login to Reply

Rebecca Larkin Date: 8/30/2013 6:46:00 PM empowering and deep words that strike out. We all have our instances that cause us to feel in different ways much like this but are unable to describe things with such excellence. (well at least I cannot). Anyhow it is a fantastic piece and I am favoriting it. Keep up the amazing work. --Becca Login to Reply

Cherl Dunn Date: 8/28/2013 7:55:00 PM Just curious but what did you find on your look to the dark side. Nicely written thanks for your comment. cheri Login to Reply

Karen Anglesey Date: 8/16/2013 6:27:00 PM I really feel the emotions of dwelling on things and sometimes drowning in it. I can relate. Very well written. Login to Reply

Debbie Duncan Date: 8/9/2013 1:26:00 PM Oh I agree with this so much. I know I over think too much, with long nights ;} nice write. Thank you for reading my Alcohol ;} Login to Reply

Dan Kearley Date: 8/8/2013 11:21:00 PM The other side hey? Very nice write. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/8/2013 4:34:00 PM Over thinking myself..That does happen doesn't it...Enjoyed reading your creative work..Sara Login to Reply

Jack Ellison Date: 8/8/2013 12:20:00 PM "Over thinking" is a habit of mine. Invariably, it turns negative so I try to avoid it! A very well written poem, my dear Laura! Big warm hugs... xoxox Login to Reply