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The One Shunned

humming honeybees

collect nectar from flowers

shunning one of them

the blooms smile despite sun’s glare 

the one shunned wilts in despair


May 31, 2021
For M. L. Kiser's Tanka Contest Poetry Contest

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Sara Kendrick Date: 6/6/2021 5:12:00 AM Congrats on your winner. Way to go. I wonder who was shunned. Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. Sara Login to Reply

Jack Horne Date: 6/4/2021 1:37:00 PM i really love the way you did this one Login to Reply

David Kavanagh Date: 6/3/2021 1:53:00 PM I like the way you turned this one inside out Andrea, from a beautiful spectacle to one of despair, in a seamless almost invisible manner, your poetic eye is as sharp as ever, cheers David Login to Reply

Sam Kauffman Date: 6/3/2021 10:23:00 AM Poor little flower - so willing to share its essence now "wilting" in rejection. This touches something very deep in all of us, Andrea. At one time or another I think all of us have been the shunned blossom. Congratulations on your win my friend. Login to Reply

L Milton Hankins Date: 6/1/2021 9:46:00 AM Such a fine image expressed superbly in minimal words. Nice, Andrea. Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 6/1/2021 4:49:00 AM Lovely poem, Andrea. Superb ending line. Login to Reply

Edward Ibeh Date: 6/1/2021 4:23:00 AM Beautiful! Enjoyed your lovely tanka, Andrea:-) Login to Reply

Tom Cunningham Date: 6/1/2021 3:10:00 AM The real worry is with all the pesticides and chemicals and the bees all die, there will be many more flowers shunned. Tom Login to Reply

Victor Buhagiar Date: 6/1/2021 1:10:00 AM Lovely write. Poetic licence for the blossom that was ignored. Hugs. Login to Reply

Judy Ball Date: 5/31/2021 9:24:00 PM Awwww That's sad. Poor little blossom. Something must have been wrong with that one. God Bless, JB Login to Reply