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The Night The Rain Fell

An empty heart cries out through a long night the only sound heard is the tears that fall where pain rises to a terrible height and no one answers the lonely heart's call black is quieter when inhaled alone and the blank space of confusion intrudes when a heart's pain, struggles with the unknown tortured shadowed realms turn to darker moods How long will eyes stare into a black void? How tight will eyelids close, to find lost gleams? when the soul is barren and found devoid and pain-filled thresholds turn nightmarish dreams How long is time that will never relent? How deep is the pain when the heart is spent?

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Date: 12/27/2024 8:06:00 AM
Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, I was swept up in the aching poignant beauty of an emotional abyss expressed with your profound poetic artistry. Especially striking was "black is quieter when inhaled alone". The musical accompaniment accents the tormented mood of your verse perfectly. A Fav! I'm truly honored to share the podium with you, dear friend dear poet. Warmest wishes to you and yours for a happy new year filled with light, love, laughter, and of course, poetic inspiration.. ~Susan
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Date: 12/25/2024 7:07:00 AM
Ah i read so much everyday, on so many platforms that sometimes i dont remember poems iv read before! But this surely i can tell why i commented and faved. The ending especially has that aching touch that makes me sigh! Thank you for sharing! Congratulations on your winning placement in my contest . Hope holidays treat you well
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Date: 1/20/2024 5:07:00 AM
Your poem skilfully delves into the depths of turmoil, expressing the profound loneliness and anguish of a heart in despair. The imagery of 'cold tears' and 'black void' creates a powerful atmosphere, evoking a sense of isolation and hopelessness. The questions posed about the duration of suffering and the depth of pain add a haunting touch, emphasizing the enduring heartache. The use of language is both striking and poignant, making the reader feel the weight of the emotions described.
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Date: 1/19/2024 11:41:00 PM
This is such a poignant and soul stirring write dear frederick. I felt the depth of what you conveyed here in such eloquence. So well crafted with excellent rhymes and cadence: from all the lines what stood out for me the most was “ black is quieter when inhaled alone” what a deep and strong line that is: i think that line will stay in my mind for a long time: a fave this is for me
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