The Next Isle Over

There I was.

Inside a crowded Toys R Us
On a mid-Winter’s evening

Abrasively loud 5 year olds
And depressed fathers
Ready to throw their “angelic” brethren
Into life-size Nerf basketball hoop
(Because it was on Clearance)
To embrace sanity’s madness

I was simply here to search for a porcelain doll
For my darling 8 year old angel
To match her serene complexion

But, toddler stomps & red-faced pouts
Equivalent to octaves of Hell’s 5th circle
Could not stop the strut that suddenly coated my foggy nerd glasses

There she was.

Her 5 foot, 10 inch majestic walk
Performing exorcisms on corrupted tile floors
With each
New
Step

My ear canals
Swimming in the serenity of
Her olive-coated curves
And violet-auburn shaded, shoulder-length curly locks

Left
Right
Left

Sensual witchcraft was placed upon my resilience
Chipped away by her Hazel ribboning pupils

My heart’s atrium, flat lining, with laughing hyena smile
Frozen by igloo’s revenge upon madness

“Excuse me, sir”, she vehemently moaned

(At least, in my head)

“Hi”, I expressed with pre-pubescent coarseness.

“I’m looking for a porcelain doll.
But, I’m a tad lost in this maze. 
Could you help me find my way?”, she whispered with demure smile

With my tongue pressed against seconds’ icy arm,
Locked for dear life,
I inhaled with Olympic stature

“It’s 9 isles this way. May I show you?”, I confidently declared on sanity’s edge.

With constellations aligned by blue moon signatures,
“Yes, please”.
 
As crux of evening’s audible stresses
Faded into final curtain’s epileptic sunset,
The winds of Yahweh curtailed all foggy affirmations
Into palms of bliss

Because
On this night
I proudly took the long route

Slow dancing with magnificent silence
To the isle
That was only 2 steps to our left

I believe we both discovered our porcelain dolls on this night.

©Drake J. Eszes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Delaney Avatar
December 14, 2023 at 3:11 PM
Taking the long route makes sense in this situation, Excellent writing, Cheers, SuZ
Kelley Avatar
December 27, 2013 at 10:46 AM
DAAAAAAAAAAANNNGG!!! Bro, this is too sick...She must have been a beauty.
Tacito Avatar
December 27, 2013 at 10:47 AM
She was intensely hot. Great eye candy. Thanks man!
Torres Avatar
December 5, 2013 at 11:16 AM
nice story, Dear Drake ;) ...we wouldn't know when fate plays role for us..until we get there. I can relate with this kind of story..great joB! _AiyaH :')
Tacito Avatar
December 5, 2013 at 12:31 PM
You got that right, Aiyah. :) Thank you so much! =D
Deschler Avatar
November 26, 2013 at 10:48 PM
A very charming story, Drake! We never know where or when love will find us next. It is always when we least expect it! A really great poem, I enjoyed reading this one tonight!...Thank you so much for the wonderful comments on my latest poem. It really means a lot!
Tacito Avatar
November 27, 2013 at 10:40 AM
Amen to that. Thank you very much, Kelly. It means a lot to me too. :)
Van Breda Avatar
November 13, 2013 at 12:39 PM
Vivid descriptions and depictions of emotions. Interesting write-- really enjoyed this one.
Tacito Avatar
November 13, 2013 at 2:29 PM
Thank you so much, Kim! Yeah, this piece was super off the cuff. I had fun with this one. :)
Lu Avatar
November 9, 2013 at 11:21 PM
O My Gosh Drake, you have outdone yourself fer real man. This is excellence! Bravo and kudos rolled up and tucked neatly into cyber space. Would you friend Lucinda Cayton(me :) on facebook and post this please.... mint please, mwah! :) xoxo
Tacito Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 7:46 AM
I'll Soupmail you and we'll chat. :) Meanwhile, thank you very much for this awesome comment.
Jones Avatar
November 9, 2013 at 6:43 AM
Ahhh..the click clack of heels..:-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) .the prepubescent coarseness.. made me laugh out loud...I remember my brothers going through this..and you getting her to follow you ...what an ornery boy....what a fun way to start my day Drake..thanks...
Tacito Avatar
November 9, 2013 at 11:13 AM
Awesome! =) That is deeply appreciated, Donna.
Puddifoot Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 4:11 PM
this is another extremely well written piece from you, it held my attention from first line to last; you always put words together in such an original and unique way! :)
Tacito Avatar
November 8, 2013 at 9:36 AM
Holding your attention is always a goal. I always get curious if the reader will TRULY read a piece of this length. Your comment means a lot. Thank you, Charlotte. :)
Mcdaid Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 3:07 PM
a delightful piece beautifully penned
Tacito Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 3:30 PM
Thanks!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 9:28 AM
Good morning Drake. Some great comments below.
Tacito Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 9:53 AM
Buenos Dias! They're wonderful & enlightening comments! :) I'm so grateful.
Richards Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 2:33 PM
Are you still puffed up to OLYMPIC size, Mr. Eszes?????? If so.....please post a picture on your next blog, I can just see this whole episode taking place...what a funny story !! LOL !!! Now this is what I call being at the right place at the right time!!! It beats meeting at a bar.!!
Tacito Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 7:31 PM
LOL nah! =D YOu're hilarious!!!!!! I agree. Say no to bars! Thank you for the charmingly awesome comment, Carrie. ;-)
Jordan Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 9:42 AM
Oh how I know this feeling, althpough I must admit I never acted on it quite as you did. Nicely done... jack
Tacito Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 7:29 PM
If this did happen for real, I'd have totally done this. :) Thank you so much, Jack!
Matose Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 1:28 AM
GREAT POEM, I ENJOYED THIS CREATIVE PIECE. YOU'RE ONE HELL OF A GOOD POET DRACK. KEEP IT UP. YOU INSPIRE ME. FRIEND, JM
Tacito Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 8:38 AM
Hey Joseph! You're very kind to say that. I definitely appreciate it. =)
Hendricks Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 5:09 PM
Daydreaming is good for the soul. I wonder where my trip should take me. To a hardware store maybe? Naaa. To a beach where there are only male lifesavers. Sounds good, but the only place I can ask directions to is the cloakroom. Geez, can that idea. Lovely, entertaining writing which I muuuchly enjoyed, Drake. Licia :-)
Tacito Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 8:36 AM
I think the beach may be of benefit to you. =) Just sayin'. Hi & thank you very much, Licia!!!
Hamilton Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 3:26 PM
what a fantastic pen Drake you take your reader there Shadow x smile hug
Tacito Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 8:34 AM
That is the goal. I'm glad it worked. =) Thank you so much, Shadow!
Carrillo Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 12:26 PM
Hi Drake; this sounds like you had an advanture, but at lest you found what you wanted. Thanks for sharing and for the visit to my page. .. Lucilla
Tacito Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 12:35 PM
Certainly! This was just an adventure in my mind. :) Thanks so much, Lucilla.
Manassian Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 10:17 AM
Hey you........was hoping you had something new today....You good? Added a little something to what I wrote down at my post! ;) Hugs
Tacito Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 10:19 AM
Not for a few days. I have like 7 just waiting in the lineup for possible posting sooner or later. :) BIG HUG!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 10:04 AM
Good morning Drake, thanks for the comment and visit this morning.
Tacito Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 10:10 AM
But, of course! It's a given that I'd be there. =)
Dietrich Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 9:27 AM
wowowow, COOL poem!!! And is it a true story. I like to think so!!!
Tacito Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 9:37 AM
Why thank you, Andrea. Not a true story. But, it's true that I wrote it. :) Thanks so much!
Mc Mills-Cooper Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 8:18 PM
"Performing exorcisms on corrupted tile floors" I just sit back and wonder where you come up with these images my man...Good Work here! MC
Tacito Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 8:35 PM
It's from all those cartoons I used to watch. :) Thanks so much, Marquis!
Andresen Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 4:06 PM
- I love this, Drake !! - ( Not such a "deeeeep" poem that I have read 4 times to get it translated into Norwegian....lol.) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Tacito Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 4:12 PM
LOL!!! My apologies for your translating efforts! =) Thank you so much, Anne Lise!
Virden Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 2:47 AM
A beautiful write... And a very special Toys R US! Hope you got her number lol
Tacito Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 6:54 AM
Hey Sarai! =) All Toys R Us stores are "special" in someway. ;-) Nah, I didn't get her number because it didn't really happen to me. Though, I was inspired to write it while I was out shopping. Thanks so much & I'm very glad you came by again. =)
Sivey Avatar
November 3, 2013 at 7:52 PM
You have written quite the entertaining and enchanting write my friend! I surely loved reading this awesome poem this evening! You brought true romance to life at an unexpected place, a special Toys 'R' Us! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!
Tacito Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 6:51 AM
I know, of all places, right?? =D Thanks very much, Russell!
Delaney Avatar
November 3, 2013 at 6:49 PM
Sensual to the max......reminds me of that famous line, "you could melt all this stuff. Always a treat to read your work, SuZ
Tacito Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 6:51 AM
Hey Suz!!!!! Nice to see you & thank you very much. =)
Chircop Avatar
November 3, 2013 at 2:16 PM
This definitely made me smile.A very entertaining poem Drake : )..I love the way you describe details : )
Tacito Avatar
November 4, 2013 at 6:50 AM
Hi & thank you, Charmaine. :) I had a good time writing this one out.
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