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The Next Isle Over

There I was. Inside a crowded Toys R Us On a mid-Winter’s evening Abrasively loud 5 year olds And depressed fathers Ready to throw their “angelic” brethren Into life-size Nerf basketball hoop (Because it was on Clearance) To embrace sanity’s madness I was simply here to search for a porcelain doll For my darling 8 year old angel To match her serene complexion But, toddler stomps & red-faced pouts Equivalent to octaves of Hell’s 5th circle Could not stop the strut that suddenly coated my foggy nerd glasses There she was. Her 5 foot, 10 inch majestic walk Performing exorcisms on corrupted tile floors With each New Step My ear canals Swimming in the serenity of Her olive-coated curves And violet-auburn shaded, shoulder-length curly locks Left Right Left Sensual witchcraft was placed upon my resilience Chipped away by her Hazel ribboning pupils My heart’s atrium, flat lining, with laughing hyena smile Frozen by igloo’s revenge upon madness “Excuse me, sir”, she vehemently moaned (At least, in my head) “Hi”, I expressed with pre-pubescent coarseness. “I’m looking for a porcelain doll. But, I’m a tad lost in this maze. Could you help me find my way?”, she whispered with demure smile With my tongue pressed against seconds’ icy arm, Locked for dear life, I inhaled with Olympic stature “It’s 9 isles this way. May I show you?”, I confidently declared on sanity’s edge. With constellations aligned by blue moon signatures, “Yes, please”. As crux of evening’s audible stresses Faded into final curtain’s epileptic sunset, The winds of Yahweh curtailed all foggy affirmations Into palms of bliss Because On this night I proudly took the long route Slow dancing with magnificent silence To the isle That was only 2 steps to our left I believe we both discovered our porcelain dolls on this night. ©Drake J. Eszes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 12/14/2023 3:11:00 PM
Taking the long route makes sense in this situation, Excellent writing, Cheers, SuZ
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Date: 12/27/2013 10:46:00 AM
DAAAAAAAAAAANNNGG!!! Bro, this is too sick...She must have been a beauty.
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Date: 12/27/2013 10:47:00 AM
She was intensely hot. Great eye candy. Thanks man!
Date: 12/5/2013 11:16:00 AM
nice story, Dear Drake ;) ...we wouldn't know when fate plays role for us..until we get there. I can relate with this kind of story..great joB! _AiyaH :')
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Date: 12/5/2013 12:31:00 PM
You got that right, Aiyah. :) Thank you so much! =D
Date: 11/26/2013 10:48:00 PM
A very charming story, Drake! We never know where or when love will find us next. It is always when we least expect it! A really great poem, I enjoyed reading this one tonight!...Thank you so much for the wonderful comments on my latest poem. It really means a lot!
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Date: 11/27/2013 10:40:00 AM
Amen to that. Thank you very much, Kelly. It means a lot to me too. :)
Date: 11/13/2013 12:39:00 PM
Vivid descriptions and depictions of emotions. Interesting write-- really enjoyed this one.
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Date: 11/13/2013 2:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, Kim! Yeah, this piece was super off the cuff. I had fun with this one. :)
Date: 11/9/2013 11:21:00 PM
O My Gosh Drake, you have outdone yourself fer real man. This is excellence! Bravo and kudos rolled up and tucked neatly into cyber space. Would you friend Lucinda Cayton(me :) on facebook and post this please.... mint please, mwah! :) xoxo
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Date: 11/10/2013 7:46:00 AM
I'll Soupmail you and we'll chat. :) Meanwhile, thank you very much for this awesome comment.
Date: 11/9/2013 6:43:00 AM
Ahhh..the click clack of heels..:-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) .the prepubescent coarseness.. made me laugh out loud...I remember my brothers going through this..and you getting her to follow you ...what an ornery boy....what a fun way to start my day Drake..thanks...
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Date: 11/9/2013 11:13:00 AM
Awesome! =) That is deeply appreciated, Donna.
Date: 11/7/2013 4:11:00 PM
this is another extremely well written piece from you, it held my attention from first line to last; you always put words together in such an original and unique way! :)
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Date: 11/8/2013 9:36:00 AM
Holding your attention is always a goal. I always get curious if the reader will TRULY read a piece of this length. Your comment means a lot. Thank you, Charlotte. :)
Date: 11/7/2013 3:07:00 PM
a delightful piece beautifully penned
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Date: 11/7/2013 3:30:00 PM
Thanks!
Date: 11/7/2013 9:28:00 AM
Good morning Drake. Some great comments below.
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Date: 11/7/2013 9:53:00 AM
Buenos Dias! They're wonderful & enlightening comments! :) I'm so grateful.
Date: 11/6/2013 2:33:00 PM
Are you still puffed up to OLYMPIC size, Mr. Eszes?????? If so.....please post a picture on your next blog, I can just see this whole episode taking place...what a funny story !! LOL !!! Now this is what I call being at the right place at the right time!!! It beats meeting at a bar.!!
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Date: 11/6/2013 7:31:00 PM
LOL nah! =D YOu're hilarious!!!!!! I agree. Say no to bars! Thank you for the charmingly awesome comment, Carrie. ;-)
Date: 11/6/2013 9:42:00 AM
Oh how I know this feeling, althpough I must admit I never acted on it quite as you did. Nicely done... jack
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Date: 11/6/2013 7:29:00 PM
If this did happen for real, I'd have totally done this. :) Thank you so much, Jack!
Date: 11/6/2013 1:28:00 AM
GREAT POEM, I ENJOYED THIS CREATIVE PIECE. YOU'RE ONE HELL OF A GOOD POET DRACK. KEEP IT UP. YOU INSPIRE ME. FRIEND, JM
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Date: 11/6/2013 8:38:00 AM
Hey Joseph! You're very kind to say that. I definitely appreciate it. =)
Date: 11/5/2013 5:09:00 PM
Daydreaming is good for the soul. I wonder where my trip should take me. To a hardware store maybe? Naaa. To a beach where there are only male lifesavers. Sounds good, but the only place I can ask directions to is the cloakroom. Geez, can that idea. Lovely, entertaining writing which I muuuchly enjoyed, Drake. Licia :-)
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Date: 11/6/2013 8:36:00 AM
I think the beach may be of benefit to you. =) Just sayin'. Hi & thank you very much, Licia!!!
Date: 11/5/2013 3:26:00 PM
what a fantastic pen Drake you take your reader there Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 11/6/2013 8:34:00 AM
That is the goal. I'm glad it worked. =) Thank you so much, Shadow!
Date: 11/5/2013 12:26:00 PM
Hi Drake; this sounds like you had an advanture, but at lest you found what you wanted. Thanks for sharing and for the visit to my page. .. Lucilla
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Date: 11/5/2013 12:35:00 PM
Certainly! This was just an adventure in my mind. :) Thanks so much, Lucilla.
Date: 11/5/2013 10:17:00 AM
Hey you........was hoping you had something new today....You good? Added a little something to what I wrote down at my post! ;) Hugs
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Date: 11/5/2013 10:19:00 AM
Not for a few days. I have like 7 just waiting in the lineup for possible posting sooner or later. :) BIG HUG!
Date: 11/5/2013 10:04:00 AM
Good morning Drake, thanks for the comment and visit this morning.
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Date: 11/5/2013 10:10:00 AM
But, of course! It's a given that I'd be there. =)
Date: 11/5/2013 9:27:00 AM
wowowow, COOL poem!!! And is it a true story. I like to think so!!!
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Date: 11/5/2013 9:37:00 AM
Why thank you, Andrea. Not a true story. But, it's true that I wrote it. :) Thanks so much!
Date: 11/4/2013 8:18:00 PM
"Performing exorcisms on corrupted tile floors" I just sit back and wonder where you come up with these images my man...Good Work here! MC
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Date: 11/4/2013 8:35:00 PM
It's from all those cartoons I used to watch. :) Thanks so much, Marquis!
Date: 11/4/2013 4:06:00 PM
- I love this, Drake !! - ( Not such a "deeeeep" poem that I have read 4 times to get it translated into Norwegian....lol.) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/4/2013 4:12:00 PM
LOL!!! My apologies for your translating efforts! =) Thank you so much, Anne Lise!
Date: 11/4/2013 3:58:00 PM
little girls have their spells. and so do confused young ladies that need help.
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Date: 11/4/2013 4:11:00 PM
Heh, quite right, John. :) Thanks for coming by here!
Date: 11/4/2013 2:47:00 AM
A beautiful write... And a very special Toys R US! Hope you got her number lol
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Date: 11/4/2013 6:54:00 AM
Hey Sarai! =) All Toys R Us stores are "special" in someway. ;-) Nah, I didn't get her number because it didn't really happen to me. Though, I was inspired to write it while I was out shopping. Thanks so much & I'm very glad you came by again. =)
Date: 11/3/2013 7:52:00 PM
You have written quite the entertaining and enchanting write my friend! I surely loved reading this awesome poem this evening! You brought true romance to life at an unexpected place, a special Toys 'R' Us! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 11/4/2013 6:51:00 AM
I know, of all places, right?? =D Thanks very much, Russell!
Date: 11/3/2013 6:49:00 PM
Sensual to the max......reminds me of that famous line, "you could melt all this stuff. Always a treat to read your work, SuZ
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Date: 11/4/2013 6:51:00 AM
Hey Suz!!!!! Nice to see you & thank you very much. =)
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