The Mouse

yellow cat's eyes shine from under green canopy the mouse sees nothing

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Richard Palmer

Date: 7/25/2012 7:21:00 PM

dinner is served,great write Francine

Peggy Caulfield

Date: 6/26/2012 6:20:00 PM

And snatch , the little mousy is gone forever into the belly of big pussy cat machine. Cat stretches after being fed such a yummy dinner.

Terry L. Allen

Date: 4/29/2012 12:37:00 AM

probably won't see anything ever again either. A picture well painted of impending doom. You know these little Haiku are a bit addicting. The value is not in how many words we say but in the value of the words we do say. May a basket of happy get left on your doorstep and move in. Huggs TLee

Robert Pettit

Date: 4/2/2012 9:56:00 PM

A mouse has no chance against a cat. Not only is the cat bigger and stronger, it is also very cunning. Good haiku about two links in the food chain.

Joann Grisetti

Date: 4/1/2012 2:24:00 PM

Oh, the poor mouse. Watch out. Great haiku.

Jack Horne

Date: 4/1/2012 9:16:00 AM

lovely haiku, francine. thanks very much - enjoyed your contest

Broken Butterfly

Date: 4/1/2012 8:13:00 AM

Thanks Francine for my 4th place in your Cobweb and Dust Contest, I am so happy you liked my poem. I think your haiku is great, so visual, poor little mouse, I have a cat but I am happy she seems to be afraid of everything that moves like mice and bugs.

Kim Merryman

Date: 3/31/2012 9:34:00 AM

Fantastic haiku, Francine. I like this. Love, Kim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/31/2012 9:03:00 AM

ooooh, I like this one!!!