The Moth

A lone moth flits around my front porch light
as wind blows through my window, luring me
to step outside into black velvet’s night.

I search the sky, but no moon can I see.
It seems it’s disappeared, just like my love.
The moaning wind plays havoc with my hair
as that old bulb sways crazily above.
In solitude, I simply stand and stare
at that fool insect! How can it not know
the falseness of the light that it’s drawn to?

Fluorescent doom replaces moon’s sweet glow.
I know this well because in losing you
I lost love’s gleam; I lost my everything, 
and still that silly moth is fluttering. . .


written 11/6/2014 
Submitted Sept. 12, 2022
For Mark Toney's 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 14 Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Watt Avatar
December 31, 2019 at 12:52 AM
Such a tinge of sadness in this. Using a common bug to start and end your musings on loneliness is profound and great at setting the mood. I like where you space your stanzas for dramatic effect. I haven't seen that in other sonnets, but I think it's very effective. Words that set the mood: black velvet's night, moaning, havoc, crazily, falseness, and especially fluorescent doom. So beautifully created and constructed, fellow sonneteer! Hugs ~ John
Duncan Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 6:01 PM
Love the the deeper ones you write. congrats :)
Nusker Avatar
September 18, 2016 at 10:36 PM
Andrea it's such a deep and lovely poem. Congrats on your win again with this one.
Scars Avatar
September 18, 2016 at 6:00 PM
Andrea-will always adore this one lady! congratulations on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
Canerdy Avatar
August 30, 2016 at 9:35 AM
What beautiful poem! Andrea, congratulations on your win! Janice
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 30, 2016 at 3:37 AM
Oh yeah, I remember this one Andrea. A superb win for you! Congratulations my friend on your first placement. : ) 7
Neumann Avatar
August 30, 2016 at 3:33 AM
Congratulation on your win. What a moth. She is privileged not to know, maybe. Kai
Y. Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 1:08 PM
Hi Andrea, This is such a sad write. Great use of metaphors. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
Smith Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 12:20 PM
Such a sad metaphor but touching win, congratulations Andrea...
Nusker Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 11:49 AM
Oohhh Andrea it is so heart touching. Very well written. Congratulations on your win.
Krampe Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 11:12 AM
Such a beautiful, sad poem - congrats on your win, Andrea. Agnes
Scars Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 10:02 AM
Oh Andrea, loved this poem so much...very sad :( which is what I was looking for...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest:)-luloo
Makama Avatar
March 21, 2016 at 11:50 AM
Beautiful! Beautiful! So beautiful
Lindley Avatar
December 24, 2015 at 2:58 PM
A sonnet to be savored and careful considered as its message so deeply expresses a sad lost in love. Congrats on your win my friend!!
Tor Avatar
December 24, 2015 at 9:15 AM
Wonderful entry and win Andrea!
Kimathi Avatar
December 24, 2015 at 2:54 AM
Hi Andrea. Congrats for your wonderful placement in the contest! ;-)
A  Avatar
December 24, 2015 at 2:21 AM
AWESOME WIN
Nance Avatar
December 23, 2015 at 7:05 PM
Very well done...grats on your placement
Haight Avatar
December 23, 2015 at 5:36 PM
Great Sonnet, Andrea. I do remember this one. Sad and beautifully done. Congrats on your placement. Hugs, Sandra
Gentry Avatar
December 23, 2015 at 1:17 PM
Congratulations on placing with this well-written poem. So real, so sad, so true. 7
Eberhart Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 11:44 AM
Reading thru Best Sonnets is like judging a contest blind. I picked this as an exemplary choice.. and then found out that it was yours. No surprise, your talent is consistent.
Ward Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 8:13 AM
Dear Andrea, I enjoyed this on an emotional, but also technical level. The latter is outstanding in the last line. Julia, xx
Haight Avatar
November 20, 2014 at 1:57 PM
Hi Andrea, stopping by again to congratulate you on your win! I knew when I first read it that it was awesome! Sandra
Jones Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 1:01 PM
Who can't relate to this one Andrea?...totally awesome...and I see congratulations are in order...you are a master at these....PS thanks for the note about the poem...:-)
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November 18, 2014 at 9:43 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea, with this incredible sonnet...the imagery creates such a sad scene. I love it...hugs, Rhonda
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