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The Moth

A lone moth flits around my front porch light as wind blows through my window, luring me to step outside into black velvet’s night. I search the sky, but no moon can I see. It seems it’s disappeared, just like my love. The moaning wind plays havoc with my hair as that old bulb sways crazily above. In solitude, I simply stand and stare at that fool insect! How can it not know the falseness of the light that it’s drawn to? Fluorescent doom replaces moon’s sweet glow. I know this well because in losing you I lost love’s gleam; I lost my everything, and still that silly moth is fluttering. . . written 11/6/2014 Submitted Sept. 12, 2022 For Mark Toney's 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 14 Poetry Contest

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Date: 12/31/2019 12:52:00 AM
Such a tinge of sadness in this. Using a common bug to start and end your musings on loneliness is profound and great at setting the mood. I like where you space your stanzas for dramatic effect. I haven't seen that in other sonnets, but I think it's very effective. Words that set the mood: black velvet's night, moaning, havoc, crazily, falseness, and especially fluorescent doom. So beautifully created and constructed, fellow sonneteer! Hugs ~ John
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Date: 6/17/2017 6:01:00 PM
Love the the deeper ones you write. congrats :)
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Date: 9/18/2016 10:36:00 PM
Andrea it's such a deep and lovely poem. Congrats on your win again with this one.
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Date: 9/18/2016 6:00:00 PM
Andrea-will always adore this one lady! congratulations on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
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Date: 8/30/2016 9:35:00 AM
What beautiful poem! Andrea, congratulations on your win! Janice
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Date: 8/30/2016 3:37:00 AM
Oh yeah, I remember this one Andrea. A superb win for you! Congratulations my friend on your first placement. : ) 7
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Date: 8/30/2016 3:33:00 AM
Congratulation on your win. What a moth. She is privileged not to know, maybe. Kai
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Date: 8/29/2016 1:08:00 PM
Hi Andrea, This is such a sad write. Great use of metaphors. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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Date: 8/29/2016 12:20:00 PM
Such a sad metaphor but touching win, congratulations Andrea...
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Date: 8/29/2016 11:49:00 AM
Oohhh Andrea it is so heart touching. Very well written. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 8/29/2016 11:12:00 AM
Such a beautiful, sad poem - congrats on your win, Andrea. Agnes
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Date: 8/29/2016 10:02:00 AM
Oh Andrea, loved this poem so much...very sad :( which is what I was looking for...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest:)-luloo
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Date: 3/21/2016 11:50:00 AM
Beautiful! Beautiful! So beautiful
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Date: 12/24/2015 2:58:00 PM
A sonnet to be savored and careful considered as its message so deeply expresses a sad lost in love. Congrats on your win my friend!!
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Date: 12/24/2015 9:15:00 AM
Wonderful entry and win Andrea!
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Date: 12/24/2015 2:54:00 AM
Hi Andrea. Congrats for your wonderful placement in the contest! ;-)
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Date: 12/24/2015 2:21:00 AM
AWESOME WIN
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Date: 12/23/2015 7:05:00 PM
Very well done...grats on your placement
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Date: 12/23/2015 5:36:00 PM
Great Sonnet, Andrea. I do remember this one. Sad and beautifully done. Congrats on your placement. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 12/23/2015 1:17:00 PM
Congratulations on placing with this well-written poem. So real, so sad, so true. 7
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Date: 6/29/2015 11:44:00 AM
Reading thru Best Sonnets is like judging a contest blind. I picked this as an exemplary choice.. and then found out that it was yours. No surprise, your talent is consistent.
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Date: 3/22/2015 8:13:00 AM
Dear Andrea, I enjoyed this on an emotional, but also technical level. The latter is outstanding in the last line. Julia, xx
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Date: 11/20/2014 1:57:00 PM
Hi Andrea, stopping by again to congratulate you on your win! I knew when I first read it that it was awesome! Sandra
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Date: 11/19/2014 1:01:00 PM
Who can't relate to this one Andrea?...totally awesome...and I see congratulations are in order...you are a master at these....PS thanks for the note about the poem...:-)
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Date: 11/18/2014 9:43:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea, with this incredible sonnet...the imagery creates such a sad scene. I love it...hugs, Rhonda
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