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The Moment of Death

Remain with me just a moment more, close this door
                       Let this heart become steady, until it is ready, to let you go
           just spend five more minutes so that every grief coming toward me stops
       So that every star drop,all time stops and I can see you a slight moment more


For the contest "when the fourth line helps it to rhyme "
Sponsor " Silent one "

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 9/26/2018 2:06:00 AM

Yes, wow, just one more moment...Life is so short (what a trivial comment of mine) and then it is gone. Thanks to your reminder I will try to make the most of today, thank you, Kai

Al Juman

Date: 7/8/2018 9:45:00 AM

We want more time as mortals Excellent write my friend

Afzal Nusker

Date: 6/22/2018 8:26:00 AM

This is beautifully written, love it, Faraz.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/16/2018 11:02:00 AM

So heartfelt. I love this, Faraz. Congrats.

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/16/2018 8:53:00 AM

Returning with congratulations Faraz, for your wonderful win with your exceptional poem of intense emotions. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/15/2018 10:07:00 AM

Hi Faraz, congratulations on your well-deserved win! Excellent piece - so beautiful! Best regards. Pandita

Eve Roper

Date: 6/14/2018 9:00:00 PM

Wonderful write, Faraz!:-) Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~’*

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/13/2018 7:34:00 AM

Congratulations for your win Faraz :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/13/2018 7:27:00 AM

- Congratulations on your little rhyme poem, Faraz :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Silent One

Date: 6/13/2018 7:19:00 AM

Sounds lovely Faraz... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Maria Williams

Date: 6/11/2018 5:17:00 AM

I just love this Faraz, it has Winner stamped all over it, should do well in Silents contest, however best of luck....Maria

Gary Bateman

Date: 6/10/2018 11:57:00 AM

Hello Faraz, Best of Luck in the contest with your rhyme here!! Your final seven words in this rhyme say it all: "I could see you a slight moment more." Your rhyme gives the reader much to think about. That final moment will come one day for all of us. Best Wishes, Gary

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/10/2018 11:11:00 AM

Holding my breath as I read your lovely 4 liner! Oh how we want time to linger with the one we love.

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/9/2018 7:34:00 PM

Faraz, such beautiful aching sorrow saturates your pleading poetic lines of just wanting a little more time.. a poem of intense emotional imagery.. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan