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The moment of death

Remain with me just a moment more, close this door Let this heart become steady, until it is ready, to let you go just spend five more minutes so that every grief coming toward me stops So that every star drop,all time stops and I can see you a slight moment more For the contest "when the fourth line helps it to rhyme " Sponsor " Silent one "

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 9/26/2018 2:06:00 AM
Yes, wow, just one more moment...Life is so short (what a trivial comment of mine) and then it is gone. Thanks to your reminder I will try to make the most of today, thank you, Kai
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Date: 7/8/2018 9:45:00 AM
We want more time as mortals Excellent write my friend
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Date: 6/22/2018 8:26:00 AM
This is beautifully written, love it, Faraz.
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Date: 6/16/2018 11:02:00 AM
So heartfelt. I love this, Faraz. Congrats.
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Date: 6/16/2018 8:53:00 AM
Returning with congratulations Faraz, for your wonderful win with your exceptional poem of intense emotions. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/15/2018 10:07:00 AM
Hi Faraz, congratulations on your well-deserved win! Excellent piece - so beautiful! Best regards. Pandita
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Date: 6/14/2018 9:00:00 PM
Wonderful write, Faraz!:-) Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~’*
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Date: 6/13/2018 7:34:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Faraz :)
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Date: 6/13/2018 7:27:00 AM
- Congratulations on your little rhyme poem, Faraz :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/13/2018 7:19:00 AM
Sounds lovely Faraz... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 6/11/2018 5:17:00 AM
I just love this Faraz, it has Winner stamped all over it, should do well in Silents contest, however best of luck....Maria
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Date: 6/10/2018 11:57:00 AM
Hello Faraz, Best of Luck in the contest with your rhyme here!! Your final seven words in this rhyme say it all: "I could see you a slight moment more." Your rhyme gives the reader much to think about. That final moment will come one day for all of us. Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 6/10/2018 11:11:00 AM
Holding my breath as I read your lovely 4 liner! Oh how we want time to linger with the one we love.
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Date: 6/9/2018 7:34:00 PM
Faraz, such beautiful aching sorrow saturates your pleading poetic lines of just wanting a little more time.. a poem of intense emotional imagery.. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
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Date: 6/9/2018 2:24:00 PM
An enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Also thanks for your visit.
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Date: 6/9/2018 11:26:00 AM
A brillant Rhyme wrapped in gripping imagery! The best of luck in the contest Faraz.. stay bright and blessed.
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Date: 6/9/2018 8:46:00 AM
Lovely ... Liked all the lines and the aggregate too ...
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Date: 6/8/2018 8:11:00 PM
Very nicely done for his contest, Faraz. I thank you for your interesting comments on my poems you read.
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Date: 6/8/2018 6:46:00 PM
A plea for time...maybe she'll give it to you...Al the best Faraz
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