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The Mind Castle

I look around for beauty trying to step out locked in a castle castle I built of my mind with ice to stop the flowing of emotions I had to hide my failures somewhere deep I built a castle in the oceans feet a castle of ice hoping it will melt with the warmth of someone bright but came none a soul that could melt through the thick castle of ice So my mind is stuck forever in ice in hopes of melting through purpose of life

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Silent One

Date: 12/1/2023 12:48:00 PM

A deep poem Nazmin.. Welcome to poetry soup. I look forward to reading more of your poems and I hope you enjoy your time on here..

Nazmin Saikia
Date: 3/18/2024 7:40:00 AM

Thank you. I will enjoy writing more.

Beata Agustin

Date: 12/1/2023 5:25:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.

Nazmin Saikia
Date: 3/18/2024 7:41:00 AM

Thank you for such warm response. I will write more and contribute to Poetry Soup.

Jeanette Swan

Date: 11/29/2023 11:34:00 PM

I like how the word 'ice' repeats to enhance the sense of being stuck. I also like how the beginning and the end have a slender hope, stepping out to look for beauty, and a hope that the ice castle melts (like ice-cream!).I like how this poem creates the feeling of being stuck, yet hopeful :)

Nazmin Saikia
Date: 3/18/2024 7:42:00 AM

Your view on the poem is what keeps me going. Thank you for your responses.