Nazmin Saikia Poet Suzette Prime

The Mind Castle

I look around for beauty
trying to step out
locked in a castle
castle I built of my mind with ice
to stop the flowing of emotions
I had to hide my failures somewhere deep
I built a castle
in the oceans feet
a castle of ice
hoping it will melt
with the warmth of someone bright
but came none
a soul that could melt
through the thick castle of ice
So my mind is stuck
forever in ice
in hopes of melting
through purpose of life

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Silent One December 1, 2023 at 12:48 PM A deep poem Nazmin.. Welcome to poetry soup. I look forward to reading more of your poems and I hope you enjoy your time on here.. Nazmin Saikia March 18, 2024 at 7:40 AM Thank you. I will enjoy writing more.

Beata Agustin December 1, 2023 at 5:25 AM Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed. Nazmin Saikia March 18, 2024 at 7:41 AM Thank you for such warm response. I will write more and contribute to Poetry Soup.

Jeanette Swan November 29, 2023 at 11:34 PM I like how the word 'ice' repeats to enhance the sense of being stuck. I also like how the beginning and the end have a slender hope, stepping out to look for beauty, and a hope that the ice castle melts (like ice-cream!).I like how this poem creates the feeling of being stuck, yet hopeful :) Nazmin Saikia March 18, 2024 at 7:42 AM Your view on the poem is what keeps me going. Thank you for your responses.