Mel Merrill Poet Rhyme

The Message In a Bottle

Should you ever find a poem,
One I needed you to see--
Tucked safely in a bottle
Tossed about a wind-swept sea,

It's a message in a bottle,
Adrift a year--or even ten--
Though once it's been unsealed
You will understand it then.

I was not the man you thought I was;
Neither arrogant, nor small--
But one who sadly fell from love,
And could not endure the fall.

But I need for you to know this,
Should the bottle be retrieved--
That I once knew a love like yours
And in miracles, believed.

For once upon a moonlit night,
A fairytale came true--
And fixed my heart with gilded wings;
And to the stars I flew.

I was kidnapped by her beauty,
And held hostage by her grace--
Imprisoned by her bedroom eyes
And divinely fashioned face.

This was the poem of my life,
For I fell but rose above--
A gentle man who dreamed a dream,
And was helplessly in love.

~M

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Elaine George July 2, 2014 at 6:00 AM Wow!!!! How romatic is this????? Awesome writing, Mel. So lyrical...reads like a melody. Lainie

Arthur Vaso June 23, 2014 at 1:00 AM Great write Mel, is by chance I did a few on the same title!!!! Mel Merrill June 23, 2014 at 1:36 AM How interesting. I've been amazed to discover other poems with the same name as one of mine--and sometimes unusual names, too. Go figure. Thanks Arthur for reading this, and for commenting. I hope you had a nice weekend. Be well, my friend...mel :)

Poet Destroyer A June 21, 2014 at 12:03 AM LOL, Mel, actually we both spelled it wrong... Here's the correct spelling. "Schlitterbahn" weee! I was way off.... haha I've been there, however, it was terrifying... xox..Linda Mel Merrill June 21, 2014 at 3:17 AM Well, I got the wet and cold part right, anyway ...lol Poet Destroyer A June 21, 2014 at 12:05 AM No medal for you :(

Poet Destroyer A June 19, 2014 at 3:16 PM Yes, Schliterban, is a blast, I might go this summer. I don't know just yet :) Linda Mel Merrill June 19, 2014 at 10:47 PM Hey, I nearly spelled it correctly! Seems like I should get a plaque or something...lol...I remember the water was cold, but it was awesome! I did the thing where you ride the boogie board against the wave machine. I lasted about 12 seconds before being tossed into the street....Lol It was xxool...Au revoir...Mel :)

Poet Destroyer A June 17, 2014 at 1:08 AM Yeah,,,, San Antonio Spurs...... LOL Mel Merrill June 18, 2014 at 2:23 PM Nooo! I hate em' Had some great teams, though :) Btw, it was summer, and my sis and our fams went to Shcliterbaugn, or whatever it's called. Been there? That was a blast!!!

Poet Destroyer A June 16, 2014 at 7:49 PM My day, was okay, not a blast, LOL...it's okay, my dad probably had a great steady time. Thanks for asking Mel... I got my dad, a nice bottle of rum. LOL, he's not a drinker, but I know he can add it to his collection. He's too old for a tie. I also got him a nice leather belt. :) Linda Mel Merrill June 17, 2014 at 12:41 AM Can't have too many belts...for drinking, or for pants...lol...I think I mentioned that I lived for about a year in McKinney, but the farthest south I ever got (notice I correctly wrote farthest, not furthest, which refers to degree rather than distance--boy am I bored, and this is far too lengthy a parenthetical) was San Antonio...lol...Hope you're well :)

Poet Destroyer A June 15, 2014 at 7:03 PM Happy Father's Day Mel... How about a tie.. :) Mel Merrill June 16, 2014 at 12:33 AM I'll take a tie! How about something dark red--burgundy to play off my black and grey suits? I wonder how your day went...xool, I hope...Mel :)

Poet Destroyer A June 14, 2014 at 11:24 PM :) Linda Mel Merrill June 15, 2014 at 12:18 AM Hey Linda. In case my kids forget all about me tomorrow, I'll take a one pound box of Sees Candy--assorted is fine, though I luv the chocolate butters :) :) :)

Poet Destroyer A June 9, 2014 at 8:00 AM ha, glad you think I'm XOOL... XOOL LINDA Mel Merrill June 11, 2014 at 12:41 AM Tellin it like it is, girl...just tellin like it is. :)

Poet Destroyer A June 8, 2014 at 7:32 PM Oh My I love this one Mel, swept away by the sea. I once placed a poem in a bottle. TRUE STORY!!! I'm crazy like that. Intoxicating from start to end. The motion, and once upon a moonlight is superb. The ending holds up like a dream. Excellent write, enjoyed stopping by... Linda Mel Merrill June 8, 2014 at 11:50 PM Hi Linda! Thanks for the visit and kind words. How cool that you actually did that...you're crazy as me lol Have court in the AM, but will visit tomorrow evening...xxx...Mel :)

Faye Gibson June 8, 2014 at 3:47 PM Mel, ah, how you spin the lovely words in a delicious flowing melody that allures the heart of those who read. Well done. Thanks for visiting my "At Gettysburg." Mel Merrill June 8, 2014 at 11:53 PM Thank you Faye. Sometimes the words and rhyme just come to me and flow; other times it's work. Glad you appreciate the result, however. I really do try to make my writes accessible and seemingly effortless. Hugs and smiles...Mel :)

Vera Duggan June 7, 2014 at 11:57 PM Mel that is such a beautiful poem, the rhyming etc. down to a tee, often thought of doing that myself throwing a message into the ocean, wouldn't it be wonderful to know that someone on the other side of the world has read it, thank you for sharing that wonderful piece, take care.....Vera................ Mel Merrill June 8, 2014 at 1:39 AM Thank you so much, Vera. That would be awesome, and what was going through my mind when writing this...that and the idea that the finder would tell the world who I really was. Might have had the film, Meassage In a Bottle in the unconscious, but I wasn't thinking of it--till after. Hugs...mel :)

Ilene Bauer June 7, 2014 at 8:19 PM i love how effortless your poems seem to be - the rhyme and rhythm are just perfect! this one is poignant and very beautiful... Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 11:02 PM Thank you my sweet. Sometimes they come together; sometimes they don't. I'm glad you liked this, and hope to see ya soon. Hugs...Mel :)

Casarah Nance June 7, 2014 at 6:47 PM Babe, what a marvelous poem, you are writing these words that speak to my heart, it is like you are writing them to the breath of my soul. I dig it babe, beyond all the cliches I really dig it :) Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 11:05 PM Thank you Cas. That's quite a comment. I wish I could frame it--and you :) I am glad it spoke to you...this one's straight from the heart...xox...mel :)

Arthur Vaso June 7, 2014 at 6:14 PM I just read Richards comment and laughed, I guess great minds do think alike!!!! LOL Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 11:11 PM That is funny. I guess we now know who the great minds are lol

Arthur Vaso June 7, 2014 at 6:12 PM Mel, this is well PERFECT, FROM START TO Finish, including the title, A7 and a fav, cheers Arthur Vaso June 7, 2014 at 11:18 PM You are very talented, no doubt about that. Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 11:09 PM How kind of you Arthur. I'll take 7's any day, but a fav? That's an honor :) Thank you sooo much. I don't write many perfect poems these days lol Stay in touch, and have a great Sunday, my friend...Mel :)

Pandita Sietesantos June 7, 2014 at 11:09 AM Mel, you're the man - a man in love! Just a wonderful, romantic poem! Great write! Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 1:28 PM Thank you Pan, and I guess I'll always be in love--that's who I am. It's an elusive little gremlin, though :) I appreciate your visit and kind words. Have a great weekend, my friend...Mel :)

Robert Lindley June 7, 2014 at 10:10 AM My friend, what a pleasant surprise! I just now read and found another gem to add to my fav list!!! This write is truly and I mean truly awesome!!!! BBBBBBBravooo!!! Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 1:26 PM Thank you Robert, for the comment and the very kind mail. Your support is more than welcome, and I value your opinion. Thanks for the visit and generous comment. Hugs and smiles :)

Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2014 at 9:38 AM Fantastic! Perfect from start to finish. Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 1:31 PM Very kind of you Richard, and I appreciate the words of support and encouragement. You know how insecure us poets can be :) Have a great weekend, my friend...Mel :)

Tim Smith June 7, 2014 at 6:32 AM Love is a very powerful thing Mel. It rips at your heart when you lose it and you will do anything to get it back...Your poem has great rhyme and flows very well my friend......Hope cupids arrow will find you again one day.....Tim Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 1:35 PM Your right! Cupid's arrows have been missing there mark of late, but who knows about tomorrow. Thanks for the visit and comment. Peace and smiles...Mel :)

Dr.Ram Mehta June 7, 2014 at 5:33 AM Beautiful expressions on being imprisoned by love, Mel Mel Merrill June 7, 2014 at 1:37 PM Thank you Dr., it's a metaphor that came to me--and seems appropriate. Thank you for the visit, my friend...Mel :)