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The Mark

You captured my heart when I first looked at you It was no way I refused your every command You grabbed my waist and pulled me to you I knew what you wanted just by looking into your eyes you seduced me I tilted my head to the side revealing my neck you kissed it softly then started to suck Softly at first then with more force leaving your mark on me then your work was done And it was my first passion mark created with love

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Mary Rotman

Date: 8/12/2015 8:17:00 PM

Critique is a give and take and learning about each other. As I mentioned before, you do a nice job of building up to it. Just some thoughts. Good luck

Mary Rotman

Date: 8/12/2015 3:42:00 PM

Vibrant description of a kiss. one question: "It was no way I refuse your every command" Not sure what you mean here. Do you realize that this poem can be read every other line, starting on first or second, and be 2 poems? That's quite an achievement!