Laura Breidenthal Poet Free verse

The Magnetism of Our Union

 Nice and slow, I feel you coming on
Persistent, messy, though fragile
You are over me, under me, beyond me
Crushing my lingering patience,
So that it no longer lingers, 
But putrefies

And all the while, I feel you coming on

Over me, under me, beyond me
You know you have planned this muddle
Organized, and poised, I did not take the bait
I became the bait
And you bit…by bliss you did bite

I was so afraid that your teeth were going to shatter…
Because I had been made by laboring stonemasons
Who were trained to reduce the most radiant of rock into devil
I was so hard-pressed in the ugliness
Though in that moment, you sank in, and deeply….

Over me, under me, and beyond me
You came onto me
And all the devil slammed into my being dissipated

Now I can barely stand without you…….

The magnetism of our union continues to intensify
For even patience has her prowl
And her rot is built on our magnum opuses  

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Justin Bordner April 23, 2015 at 8:58 PM The destruction of Patience is so grotesque and emblematical of transformation. The nature of magnetism is electro gravity, this is also the physics of love as a natural force growing towards it's source. Love demands that we learn to support ourselves so that we can build with another my Gothic Princess. Patience for heart union should decompose into a fire of new action! The intrepid bite of desire is so sensuous in your description Laura...J.A.B. Laura Breidenthal April 23, 2015 at 9:34 PM So pleased by your wise words, Justin. When true love collides, our character changes, often for the better. Even the most rotten of emotions can be built on something truly grand and divine. Glad you understand where I'm coming from. <3 <3 ~Laura

Tim Smith April 23, 2015 at 1:38 PM Statuesque Laura...loved the flow Tim Laura Breidenthal April 23, 2015 at 9:25 PM Statuesque, indeed! Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for the feedback! Always appreciated. ~Laura

Jack Ellison April 23, 2015 at 10:17 AM I am so so impressed my dearest Laura! Such beauty in every line! Wish I could write such intensity and passion! 10+++ Love, Jack xxx Laura Breidenthal April 23, 2015 at 9:26 PM Love ya Jack. Your passion is different, unique and so so refreshing. Thanks for the visits! You're one sweet poet. <3 ~Laura

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser April 23, 2015 at 8:36 AM powerful what I can say more!! beautiful and the lines afire with intensity.. i like the repeating line.. :)!!//olive eloisa Laura Breidenthal April 23, 2015 at 9:27 PM I'm glad you can appreciate the repeating line. Thanks Olive; I am always happy for your input. ~Laura