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The Long Look

Your cheeks flared crimson, through my misty eyes as recognition dawned, you held my gaze, our awkward smiles and nods could not disguise the memories recalled, forgotten days. Seeds of our love were sown one winter's night, two seasons passed, like shoots we watched them grow for Summer harvesting, the time seemed right, on bended knee, a ring, please don't say no. We walked the shore at sundown, arm in arm, you picked your way through rocks with easy grace, chorus of breaking waves weaving their charms the breeze whipped strands of hair across your face. In hindsight we reaped our harvest much too soon, the shoots not strong enough to weather storms, before year's end our hearts played different tunes, from tiny arguments a tempest formed. Decades ago we went our separate ways the long shadow you cast in my heart fades the what-if's and could-be's of yesterday long buried under choices we have made. But deep inside that hazel coloured stare a flickering of something that's still there. 10th April 2018 For contest 'Ten words', sponsor Joseph May

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Date: 4/24/2018 1:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your great win, Viv.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/24/2018 8:42:00 AM
Thanks, Subimal!
Date: 4/23/2018 10:35:00 PM
Awww, an old flame... a beautiful story, you capture the scene well and a bit of 'what if' in there too. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 4/24/2018 8:42:00 AM
Thanks, Susan, you too! Viv x
Date: 4/23/2018 5:38:00 PM
Hi Viv, Congratulations on your 1st place win :-) Alexis
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/24/2018 8:43:00 AM
Thanks Alexis, enjoyed the write.
Date: 4/23/2018 2:14:00 PM
Congrats Viv on your no. 1 placement !!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/24/2018 8:43:00 AM
Thanks Mike, back atcha!
Date: 4/23/2018 1:16:00 PM
Old flames still have a spark..Congrats on your win Viv..
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Date: 4/24/2018 8:43:00 AM
Thanks Joseph, a great challenge, enjoyed it. Very kind. regards, Viv
Date: 4/10/2018 3:50:00 PM
knocking my socks off, viv... mellow in tone with that flicker of hope in the end; wow... huggs
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/11/2018 1:43:00 AM
Thanks, nette, I enjoyed composing it, in a melancholy sort of way. Viv x
Date: 4/10/2018 8:47:00 AM
So romantic, Viv. Beautifully evocative.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/11/2018 1:45:00 AM
Thanks, Line, lost loves are a good subject, but have to be handled with kid gloves. Viv x
Date: 4/10/2018 8:26:00 AM
Well written Viv. I like how you ended this poem. I am sure many can relate to this. Good luck in the contest :)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/11/2018 1:45:00 AM
Thanks, Heidi, yes, we've all been somewhere similar, and us oldies probably more than most :)
Date: 4/10/2018 7:16:00 AM
Great storytelling in your poem, Viv, your rhyme flows effortless. Good luck in the contest.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/11/2018 1:46:00 AM
Thanks, Agnes, a bit of faffing about with the words, but it settled eventually. Viv x
Date: 4/10/2018 6:49:00 AM
Funny how lost loves stay with you forever, you often think what could have been. Good luck Viv. Tom
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/11/2018 1:46:00 AM
Thanks, Tom, I think she may have had a lucky escape :)
Date: 4/10/2018 2:03:00 AM
you are a master story teller Mr Viv, what wonderful memories of the past of a love that sadly didn't last yet the embers of what once were still burn. Adding this gem to my faves, good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 4/11/2018 1:47:00 AM
Thanks, Jan, very kind. Those who find their first love is the love for their lives are pretty lucky. And rare :) . Viv x

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