Sandy Ivy D Poet Rhyme

The Loch Ness Water

The Loch Ness water

I went down by the lake,
Stumbling across the rocks,
My eyes fail to see if it was fake,
Rocks made of blocks.

What does my daddy do,
He creeps up behind me,
Slaps my head with his shoe
Now I can see!

Is that a monstrous branch?
I opened my eyes fully wide,
I swore the water’s became an avalanche,
In a trench is now where I hide.

The sun is getting hotter,
I glimpse at it closer, still it's faraway,
Whatever it is, it is in my water,
I wash up the next day by the bay.

A heavy rock,
I lay under the shade,
The world is not round, it is a block,
I live now, not afraid. “I’m not afraid!"

Scotland yard has nothing on me,
Unforgettably Nessie was really me.

Form: Classic Rhyme (20 lines or more)
Contest: Adventure, art, confusion, fantasy, imagination

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Skat A January 30, 2014 at 4:34 AM kick ass imagery

Poet Destroyer A December 11, 2013 at 2:08 AM stopping by a second and third time................... xoxoxoxoxoox ;-)

Michelle Mac Donald June 6, 2012 at 6:57 PM This certainly touches all the categories, Sandy. Glad you came out the winner with this piece! Best wishes, Mikki

Andrea Dietrich July 14, 2011 at 8:18 PM wow, this is sure imaginative. You are Nessie! Very interesting indeed. Congrats on your awesome win. Luv, Andrea

Lee Ramage July 13, 2011 at 2:35 AM Congratulations. Very cute. Lee

M. Alpestris July 12, 2011 at 12:20 PM Congratulations, Sandy! The last couple of lines really clinched it!

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 12, 2011 at 10:53 AM Very cool way on how you ended this one, Sandy! Super duper congrats on your 1st place win ^_^

Carolyn Devonshire July 12, 2011 at 10:52 AM Awesome, Sandy. I could feel the fear and angst of the "Loch Ness" inhabitant so well. Congratulations on your first place win! Love, Carolyn

Tracy Edwards July 12, 2011 at 8:26 AM Congrats on your first place win xxx

Black Eyed Susan July 12, 2011 at 7:08 AM Congratulations on your first place win :)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 12, 2011 at 4:54 AM congrats Sandy on your super first place win with this dazzling assignment luv.. enjoy the prize so well deserved luv..

Carol Sunshine Brown July 12, 2011 at 4:40 AM Congratulations Sandy on your win in the "Assignment" contest of P.D. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta July 12, 2011 at 4:00 AM My congratulations on the first place win in the contest, Sandy

Nette Onclaud July 12, 2011 at 12:44 AM swinging cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs

Poet Destroyer A July 11, 2011 at 11:51 PM Super congrats, for your first place win in my contest~ Also for the support.. I am so glad you did well on the second assignment i gave you... This poem was voted by Royal, myself and My poet friend and My sweetheart Nate D.,,, well he had hard time thinking of number ones..lol... thanks for your kind cute comment~ soup mail,..p.d. Poet Destroyer A July 11, 2011 at 11:53 PM Is that a monstrous branch? I opened my eyes on fully wide, I swore the water became an avalanche, In a trench is now where I hide.... this verse got me....loved it...

Don Johnson July 11, 2011 at 10:14 PM great verse babe, xo, Don

Poet Destroyer A June 17, 2011 at 5:19 PM Poetry Assignment# Form: Heroic_Couplets Poetry ~~ Category: fantasy, business, childhood, and art ~ Title: * published smiles *

Poet Destroyer A June 17, 2011 at 5:13 PM agree with carolyn,,, p.d.

Carolyn Devonshire June 17, 2011 at 3:57 PM If we do keep smiles on our faces, life is truly "pure quality," Sid. Enjoyed your poem. Best wishes, Carolyn