Kelly Deschler Poet Iambic Pentameter

The Leaf

Among the long grass of the land and reed,
there is a lonely place where thoughts are freed,
Saint Martin's summer spreads upon the lake
in warm conditions all domains partake.

The blazing, orange skies, on earth reflect
perfection's lingering details connect
a red, still hanging leaf has caught my gaze
spotlighted in the sun's last golden rays.

This leaf, upon the branch, began to wave,
(it's ending, little life I could not save),
and swept away by Autumn's windy rake,
imprinted ripples on the peaceful lake.

The leaf was carried, as my eyes complied,
then drowned inside the lake's blue waves that shied,
the sweeping northern gust, the leaf discerped,
that neath the surface is forever kept.









Written by Kelly Deschler   September 19th, 2014

Revised by Giorgio A. V.

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Robert Lindley December 8, 2014 at 9:35 PM Beautiful poem. Flawless in its execution. Kelly Deschler December 15, 2014 at 1:11 AM Thank you so much for your kind words, Robert... Iambic pentameter is one of the most difficult and restrictive forms to write in, and I needed some help getting it just right.

Richard Lamoureux December 3, 2014 at 3:09 PM I don't know why but this poem brought to mind the leaf that fluttered about at the beginning of Forest Gump ( it may have been a feather) either way your poem brought the scene to mind. Kelly Deschler December 6, 2014 at 4:32 PM Now that you mention it, I do recall that serene scene... Thank you for the lovely comments, Rick.

Shadow Hamilton November 15, 2014 at 11:43 AM such a fine write full of imagery Kelly it is lovely 7 hugs Kelly Deschler November 18, 2014 at 2:08 AM Thank you so much, Shadow. I'm glad you've enjoyed it! Hugs :)

Isaiah Zerbst October 23, 2014 at 7:40 PM This one I find beautiful. Sometimes a poem stays with me and I think about it for a long time, and this is one of those. Kelly Deschler October 30, 2014 at 1:49 AM Thank you very much for your kind words. They really meant a lot to me, Isaiah. I'm so glad that you've enjoyed this poem!

Daver Austin October 21, 2014 at 1:38 PM Enjoyed this one mucho, but don't know the word discerped. Hey! Do you make up words? I love to do that and if this is the case I love it. Love, daver Kelly Deschler October 26, 2014 at 1:57 AM Thank you very much, Daver. I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem! The word discerped is a real word, and it was added by Giorgio A. V. when he revised my original poem. It means to tear into pieces or to separate.

Gary Bateman October 16, 2014 at 10:54 AM Kelly, a most beautifully rendered piece her with "The Leaf." The imagery your employed in this poem is quite enchanting. Your poem is one of those that carries the reader away with it as the verses unfold one by one. BTW, I've marked you as one of my Favorite Poets. I do enjoy the style of your poetry and the care you employ in crafting your works. It Shows!! And a big "7" from me too!! Best Wishes Always, Gary Kelly Deschler October 21, 2014 at 6:00 PM Thank you once again for your kind words, Gary. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my poems. I'm happy that you've enjoyed my style of writing and decided to add me to your favorite poets! It really means a lot to me!.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio A. V., since he was responsible for rewriting my original poem and improving upon it.

Laura Breidenthal October 4, 2014 at 2:49 AM This was beyond gorgeous... I love the flow and the melancholic feel..."This leaf, upon the branch, began to wave, (it's ending, little life I could not save), and swept away by Autumn's windy rake, imprinted ripples on the peaceful lake." ...that stanza... wowed me.... incredible piece here. Thanks for sharing. : )Always, Laura Kelly Deschler October 8, 2014 at 4:30 PM Thank you for your kind comments, Laura. I really appreciate them so much. I'm happy you enjoyed my poem!.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio A. V., for revising my original poem and improving it. :)

Debbie Guzzi October 2, 2014 at 9:50 PM Please do put up your original as well Kelly, congrad's Light & Love Kelly Deschler October 7, 2014 at 1:17 AM I will keep my original version posted, since so many have enjoyed it so much.... Thank you for the kind congrats and the encouraging words. I appreciate it, Debbie!

Andrea Dietrich September 30, 2014 at 8:07 PM Same length. I see. I think you used different wording here? But honestly I really like the other just as much Kelly Deschler October 4, 2014 at 1:34 AM Thank you for commenting on both poems, Andrea. I'm glad you enjoyed both versions.... The wording had to be changed because the iambic pentameter form was not correct. The only reason I made the changes was for a contest. Otherwise, I loved my original poem just as it was! :)

Andrea Dietrich September 30, 2014 at 8:04 PM Kelly, I don't know what place you got, but I see this won. So happy for that. congratulations.

Jan Allison September 30, 2014 at 11:45 AM Wonderful imagery in this beautiful poel Kelly many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xxx Kelly Deschler October 3, 2014 at 7:13 PM Thank you for the lovely comments and kind congrats. I appreciate it so much, Jan! Hugs :)

Brenda Meier-Hans September 30, 2014 at 6:07 AM Dropping back with my congratulations on your lovely winning poem Kelly. Kelly Deschler October 3, 2014 at 6:30 PM Thank you for the nice comments and kind congrats. I appreciate you dropping by once again, Brenda.

Dr.Ram Mehta September 30, 2014 at 5:36 AM It's a beautiful poem, congrats on the win, Kelly Kelly Deschler October 3, 2014 at 6:08 PM Thank you for the nice comments and kind congrats, Dr. Ram.

Liam Mcdaid September 24, 2014 at 4:48 PM really beautifully painted visions excellent pen kelly Kelly Deschler September 30, 2014 at 1:21 AM Thank you so much, Liam. I always appreciate your kind comments, my friend!.... Giorgio A. V. deserves some of the credit for rewriting my original poem and improving it.

Poet Destroyer A September 23, 2014 at 9:26 PM Hi Kelly, thank you for the comment on my comment, this was a fine poem, and I am glad you did well. PS..thanks for enjoying your win, in my latest contest. Linda

Andrea Dietrich September 22, 2014 at 11:28 PM that is really cool how your eye followed it until it got swept away into the water. Love that ending. It makes it kind of haunting!! Kelly Deschler September 29, 2014 at 6:42 PM I'm happy that you liked this poem, Andrea. Thank you so much for your lovely comments.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio, because he was responsible for rewriting my original poem and making it better.

Brenda Meier-Hans September 22, 2014 at 10:19 AM Swept away by Autumn's windy rake. Wow, I love it. What a absolutely beautiful poem Kelly. I enjoyed reading it immensely. Kelly Deschler September 27, 2014 at 11:40 PM Thank you so much, Brenda. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio A. V., for revising my original work and improving upon it.

Arthur Vaso September 20, 2014 at 9:41 PM I absolutely adored this poem!!!! Kelly Deschler September 26, 2014 at 1:23 AM Thank you so much, Arthur. I'm happy you enjoyed it!.... I can't take all of the credit for this poem, though. Giorgio A. V. did a great job with revising my original work.

Dr.Ram Mehta September 20, 2014 at 8:24 AM beautiful imagery you have penned so well on a leaf, Kelly. I wrote long back with a different take and inspired by O Henry's short story. Kelly Deschler September 26, 2014 at 12:07 AM Thank you for your nice comments, Dr. Ram. I appreciate them very much.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio A. V., he revised my original poem to fit within the contest rules.

Paul Callus September 20, 2014 at 5:00 AM Lovely imagery that adorns this write inspired by a single lonely leaf that faded away beneath the surface of a peaceful lake. Could easily be our life that ends when finally our autumn arrives. [In Malta we have St. Martin's summer in mid November. That's when my swimming season ends!] hugs // paul Kelly Deschler September 25, 2014 at 1:56 AM Thank you for the wonderful comments, Paul. I appreciate them so much.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio A. V., he was responsible for rewriting my poem, to improve upon it.... My swimming season ends here in early September, when the weather begins to turn cool.... Hugs :)

Ma Yaseen September 20, 2014 at 12:36 AM Nice use of images, i can't figure out what the leaf can be related to, as i always try to connect the things to reality and happenings... Your poem moved me... you deserve more than 7... Hugs Kelly Deschler September 25, 2014 at 12:41 AM Thank you so much for the wonderful comments, Malik!.... Some of the credit has to go to Giorgio A. V., he was responsible for revising my poem and making it better.... My original idea was that the leaf is a metaphor for life and nature's beauty. I wanted to express that nothing lasts forever, so we should take the time to enjoy life and beauty while it exists now.... Hugs :)

Maurice Yvonne September 19, 2014 at 7:19 PM This is a stunning write Kelly. I read it several times because I loved it so. Kelly Deschler September 24, 2014 at 1:40 AM Thank you very much for your kind words, Maurice. I am so glad that you enjoyed reading this poem several times!.... Giorgio A. V. did an amazing job on rewriting this, so I cannot take all of the credit for it.

Poet Destroyer A September 19, 2014 at 6:02 PM This is wonderful Kelly, and perfect. I was moved, by the way, you gave life to that one LEAF... Luckily, it was set down on a peaceful lake... Awesome poem...LINDA Kelly Deschler September 23, 2014 at 1:41 AM Thank you for your kind comments, Linda. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this one.... I can't take all of the credit for it, though. Giorgio did a great rewrite of my original poem, just to help me with the iambic pentameter form.