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The Judgement

A child of mine was crucified When I hung it on the cross A child I cared for and created I’m grieving for my loss. It started as a tiny spark Just behind my eye It then became a twinkle On which I could rely. I was there as it was birthed On a precious sheet of white I nurtured and I raised it I felt it’s future was so bright. Coaxing gently here and there It’s own way there to find I was sure it would develop It was clever to my mind. Finally it was fully grown Was time to set it free Ready for its final trial Time to test its purity. I gently hung it on the cross Put a sign above it’s head For a group of peers deciding Was it good or was it dead. Many went right past it Few stopped to take a peek One or two, they tried to save it But it’s future did look bleak. It finally slid right off the cross It went to god knows where It wasn’t really cherished But me, I held it dear.
*Dedicated to all the poets and writers out there that post their words for others to read & with a bit of luck appreciate.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 9/30/2015 6:25:00 PM
Thanks! I get it now. Failed to say before, and neither am I The Expert...but I find your writes to be among those with deep sensitivity. Written with heart on a sleeve. Not necessarily emotional, mind you. It just means that they're not just a clump of clever words. A poem has been defined as the language of the soul. I like your language. PS. Belatedly saw the dedication. Thanks! hugs!
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Date: 9/30/2015 3:46:00 AM
I love the concept, I love the flow, I love the intent and sincerity of your poem, Mark. However I struggled with "cross". I'm really curious. I would have easily gotten there if it's a balance, or a stage, which could clearly be associated with "judgment". Maybe it's just me...?
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 12:27:00 PM
It was a bit late last night so I'm not sure I adequately answered your question. (I'm an early riser and my head works better in the morning). When I write a poem, there is a wee bit of me bared with it, whether it be my sins, my soul, my dreams. That newest 200 poems list is my "cross". It's whether my poem or I pass judgement or not. To me my stage is my "cross".
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 4:36:00 AM
It was actually really cool to have someone ask a deep question! Thank you
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 4:03:00 AM
No Kim it's not you, maybe I shouldn't have used the term but it did work with my rhyme. Historically (although it was unlikely) if one survived crucifixion they were allowed to live and go free, having passed judgement. So using the word cross could be excusable. I could also have a major achilles heel in naming poems...
Date: 9/29/2015 6:21:00 PM
I'm back to give you a 7 since I can't find a gold statue ... CayCay
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Date: 9/29/2015 6:20:00 PM
Where are the little golden dude statues? I have the need to give you one, Mark. What are adequate adjectives? I have none. You positively soared with this one, soared on up and away on a cloud of talent ... CayCay
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 3:37:00 AM
CayCay my thoughts went on a different journey with this write, and sometimes driving home a different way can be quite rewarding.
Date: 9/29/2015 5:48:00 PM
You certainly captured the heart of it my friend. And can a poet do more than that? Nay, tis not needed once the heart has been captured and displayed in ink for ALL to see. A7
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Robert Lindley
Date: 10/2/2015 9:28:00 AM
My friend,message was conveyed very well in your fine poem! Every poem written in that desire shines a light for others to see.
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 4:09:00 AM
I think we always try and write something meaningful and in our minds eye we have and we hope the message is conveyed.
Date: 9/29/2015 1:44:00 PM
Mark what a nice write my friend. They would be foolish to pass one of your writes. I related to this very well. This is felt through out this site. Loved it Mark heartfelt dedication my friend.
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 3:46:00 AM
Michael thank you for your comment, I have seen a lot of poems about peoples feeling toward their poems, they inspired me and opened the curtains
Date: 9/29/2015 9:44:00 AM
A very profound poem which describes the sincerity on the heart of the poet in clear proportions.A very excellent read this evening.
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Mark Woods
Date: 9/30/2015 4:31:00 AM
Thank you Miraj. I'm just trying to write what i feel but with a twist