The House Dark

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Meter - Trochaic Tetrameter.

...Note - Each line's end beat alternates between Acateletic to Cateletic for variation in flow....Thanks, Gene Bourne.

Rhyme - A-B / A-B

Kismet yanks the rug I'm standing, Shocked it barely sways my stance. Should have been a back-side landing, Unexpected happenchance. Anger follows loud reporting. As for me, my silence holds. I'm the villan, unsupporting, Tiresome lines, the same old role. New perspective thrills my senses, Plays must reach their final scene. As I pack, I feel a cleansing, Cancelled drama, blank marquee. Gene Bourne. 09-12-14 .

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Toni Orban

Date: 12/31/2016 5:56:00 PM

My daughter is a stage actress. I love the nod to the theatrical spectacle and the averted drama. Very sing songy yet the ending layers it with some solid bit of epigram. Thanks! Toni O.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/5/2014 6:59:00 PM

I love this! This poem is a drama itself. Out with one and in with another. "New perspective thrills my senses" - how I can relate after reading some of your work. Brilliantly penned, Gene. I write free-verse poetry usually, but I also like to experiment on meter poems. Perfect in flow, and very intriguing subject. Always,Laura

Gene Bourne
Date: 10/7/2014 7:44:00 AM

Thanks a million for the comprehensive critique, Laura. There's a world of metaphor material in theatre (and cinema). I'm glad you liked it...and your thoughtful comments only inspires one to continue...."Out with one and in with another"...a great quip from you.......Your PS friend...Gene.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 9/27/2014 11:46:00 AM

Very nice rhyme and meter on this poem Gene. Always a pleasure to read your poems. love phyl

Gene Bourne
Date: 9/27/2014 4:25:00 PM

Thanks, phyl...I like using the theatre as a metaphor. One Summer, I won a scholarship to The Asolo Repertory Theatre in Sarasota, Fl. as a Director's Apprentice. I never wanted to be an actor...but being an Art Major in college. I loved designing sets, sweeping floors...whateever needed done. There's nothing to equal the thrill of an openning night.....love Gene.

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/15/2014 8:45:00 AM

Bravo Gene!! I had to read here your latest and greatest today. With your fantastic metered work you are slowly drawing me back to that more precise environment. Since I know that you're a musician, it is quite obvious that you are in your element with this type of poetry -- and your talent, passion and preciseness rings true with every line of this quite excellent poem on Theatre Dark. You have rendered three very powerful quatrains in perfect meter and clarity. Enjoyed it much!! Cheers, Gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 9/18/2014 10:23:00 AM

Gene, you are indeed very kind with your words -- thanks!! If you can learn anything from my writing and techniques -- all the better. I will try my best to help anyone I can. The same goes for your works too particularly on the meter end. We can both learn from each other. I know I've met a few others on "PS" similarly inclined. Cheers, Gary

Gene Bourne
Date: 9/16/2014 8:51:00 AM

Gary, your comments give me extra gratification, especially from a gifted "A" list writer of your calbre. As you think of composing in meter...I read your poems and think I want to try some free verse. You've developed a unique style, combining message flow, assonance inner meter and rhyme. Your poems are a wonderful template for anyone to study...Your friend...Gene