The Goodbye Goose

- The Goodbye Goose-               
Winter polishes at four o'clock, shining all the rocks aglaze.   
Reflection, stretching shadows.                     
Longer thinner men -  longer thinner still.     
Shadowy tall , feeling small.                          
Sunmangled window in a diamond quadrant.
                        
Keyhole orifice and creeping becomes nostalgia.                    
Why dont you just shut up and call?        
Home going  geese-slipstream in a vee.    
High honking traffic, trailing vapour leaves you exposing me.
        
Cascading spirits slipping down the walls, swirling eddies   
and smoky waterfalls, draping over furniture like  slimy octopi...                     
Drunken weekend metaphors , Monday morning remorse.         
Up and down the ladders of my memory, tinkly piano playing on my spiny vertebrae.
                    
Permeating lies of my story told not of voice or tongue or lips-no.                       
But of crafty bits that left unsaid, untold encyclopaedia of me.      
T'would be so simple to top you up, yet dark forces  warn me , 
to pimp me out to you is to forfeit martyrdom and victory crown,
 deprives the joy of shooting you down, shifting the blame.         
Denies the stature as abuser , distracts my winner into loser.         
Never be a frontal goose .

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 3/1/2018 6:37:00 PM
Such wonderful movement of images...mind, love, intentions misled or led...great ride, Jannie! will look at more, very intriguing
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 3/2/2018 12:59:00 AM
Hi James. Its been a while since someone stopped by this one. I will reciprocate when I am back on soup. So thank you
Date: 9/12/2017 9:46:00 AM
Strong and beautifully descriptive.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/4/2018 2:56:00 PM
Oh Patricia you are such a loyal fan. I just love you and again so very late I only see now
Date: 12/6/2016 8:36:00 AM
Duck, duck, goose, you win. Nicely navigated 'for the birds'. Was worth the read for this line itself. 'smoky waterfalls, draping over furniture like slimy octopi' !!
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 3/24/2017 12:50:00 AM
My apologies for not replying sooner. Deeply honoured by your visit. The lady with the vocabulary that leaves the Oxford lagging hee hee
Date: 7/5/2016 3:25:00 PM
Awesome poetry, Jannie, different, and inspiring.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/7/2016 3:36:00 AM
Thank you for checkingetting me out Harry . I will do the same
Date: 6/23/2016 6:03:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work..Way to go..Very descriptive and expressive with creative use of poetic techniques..thanks for stopping by my page..I am sorry that I was so long in replying to your comment..Sara
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 6/24/2016 1:08:00 AM
Hi Sara, thanks for your valued input, now go back and read the others. Ha ha
Date: 6/23/2016 9:30:00 AM
"Cascading spirits..." love this line, it's just magical. That stanza is by far my fav, in what is a visual feast of a poem.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 6/24/2016 1:35:00 AM
Hi SCott. Thanks a whopping lot for that mouthful. Hope we can keep this up.i have quite a lot to chirp about with my country SA, burning up
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