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Eve ate the sweet, Forbidden Fruit Almighty God forbade her to. That asp, the Devil, was the root; had caused mankind's corrupt debut. Almighty God forbade her to; but Serpent's vile, malicious tongue had caused mankind's corrupt debut. Upon its promise, Eve had clung. But Serpent's vile, malicious tongue led her to crave the 'Knowledge' gift. Upon its promise, Eve had clung... from Garden's haven, she would drift. Led her to crave the 'Knowledge' gift; forbidden Apple she did eat. From Garden's haven she would drift; to grasp God's power, chose defeat. Forbidden Apple she did eat; her husband, Adam, took his share. To grasp God's power, chose defeat, and, Adam joined her in the snare. Her, husband, Adam, took his share; together they would know all things. And Adam joined her in the snare, to want more than their Garden brings. Together they would know all things. But God was angry and declared, to want more than their Garden brings, from earthly woes, they'll not be spared. But God was angry and declared, from Paradise, you now must flee. From earthy woes, you'll not be spared, for you have eaten from the Tree. From Paradise, you now must flee, life's toil and hardship you will earn, for you have eaten from the Tree. He, Lucifer, in hell, will burn. Life's toil and hardship you will earn. That asp, the Devil, was the root. He, Lucifer, in hell, will burn... Eve ate the sweet, Forbidden Fruit. April 29, 2018 Premiere Contest: The Sweat Shop Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann

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Date: 5/27/2018 4:58:00 AM
Superb write, as usual, Sandra ... you are a master craftswoman, with rare and priceless insight and imagination. Excellent! Blessings! :-) <3
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Date: 5/8/2018 5:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Absolutely love this.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/9/2018 7:48:00 AM
Thank you again, Susan, for all your visits and lovely comments. Much appreciated for sure. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/8/2018 12:57:00 AM
Congratulations Sandra on your great win.
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Date: 5/9/2018 7:47:00 AM
Thank you so much, Eve, for your nice comment! Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/7/2018 11:24:00 PM
Fabulous pantoum, Sandra, congratulations on your spiritual write!
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Date: 5/9/2018 7:46:00 AM
Thank you, Eve, for your lovely comment and congrats. Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/7/2018 8:02:00 PM
Lovely, Sandra. Congrats on your bronze medal win. Well done.
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Date: 5/9/2018 7:46:00 AM
Thank you very much, Line. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/7/2018 8:01:00 PM
I really liked how you used the Biblical account of the asp as the devilish snake ?? n your poem, Sandra! Congrats on your win :)
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/9/2018 7:46:00 AM
Thank you, Laura, for your supportive comment and congrats. Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/7/2018 7:46:00 PM
Excellent! Loved it, Sandra! Congrats!
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/9/2018 7:45:00 AM
Thank you very much, Kim. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 5/1/2018 6:25:00 PM
HOw creative of you, to take it Biblically. I imagine he very well could have been an asp in that story! I bet this will score high! Lots of work put into it.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 5/3/2018 1:20:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. I do hope this will do for the theme. Hugs, Sandra

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