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The Garden



Eve ate the sweet, Forbidden Fruit 
   Almighty God forbade her to.  
      That asp, the Devil, was the root;  
had caused mankind's corrupt debut.

Almighty God forbade her to; 
   but Serpent's vile, malicious tongue 
      had caused mankind's corrupt debut.
Upon its promise, Eve had clung.

But Serpent's vile, malicious tongue    
   led her to crave the 'Knowledge' gift.  
      Upon its promise, Eve had clung... 
from Garden's haven, she would drift.

Led her to crave the 'Knowledge' gift;
   forbidden Apple she did eat. 
      From Garden's haven she would drift;
to grasp God's power, chose defeat.

Forbidden Apple she did eat;
   her husband, Adam, took his share.
      To grasp God's power, chose defeat,
and, Adam joined her in the snare.

Her, husband, Adam, took his share;
   together they would know all things. 
      And Adam joined her in the snare,
to want more than their Garden brings.

Together they would know all things.
   But God was angry and declared,
      to want more than their Garden brings,
from earthly woes, they'll not be spared.

But God was angry and declared,
   from Paradise, you now must flee.
      From earthy woes, you'll not be spared,
for you have eaten from the Tree.

From Paradise, you now must flee,
   life's toil and hardship you will earn,
      for you have eaten from the Tree. 
He, Lucifer, in hell, will burn. 

Life's toil and hardship you will earn.
   That asp, the Devil, was the root.
      He, Lucifer, in hell, will burn... 
Eve ate the sweet, Forbidden Fruit.


April 29, 2018

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Barden Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 4:58 AM
Superb write, as usual, Sandra ... you are a master craftswoman, with rare and priceless insight and imagination. Excellent! Blessings! :-) <3
Gentry Avatar
May 8, 2018 at 5:03 PM
Congratulations on your win. Absolutely love this.
Haight Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 7:48 AM
Thank you again, Susan, for all your visits and lovely comments. Much appreciated for sure. Hugs, Sandra
Sinha-Roy Avatar
May 8, 2018 at 12:57 AM
Congratulations Sandra on your great win.
Haight Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 7:47 AM
Thank you so much, Eve, for your nice comment! Hugs, Sandra
Roper Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 11:24 PM
Fabulous pantoum, Sandra, congratulations on your spiritual write!
Haight Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 7:46 AM
Thank you, Eve, for your lovely comment and congrats. Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Gauthier Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 8:02 PM
Lovely, Sandra. Congrats on your bronze medal win. Well done.
Haight Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 7:46 AM
Thank you very much, Line. Hugs, Sandra
Leiser Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 8:01 PM
I really liked how you used the Biblical account of the asp as the devilish snake ?? n your poem, Sandra! Congrats on your win :)
Haight Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 7:46 AM
Thank you, Laura, for your supportive comment and congrats. Much appreciated. Hugs, Sandra
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:46 PM
Excellent! Loved it, Sandra! Congrats!
Haight Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 7:45 AM
Thank you very much, Kim. Hugs, Sandra
Dietrich Avatar
May 1, 2018 at 6:25 PM
HOw creative of you, to take it Biblically. I imagine he very well could have been an asp in that story! I bet this will score high! Lots of work put into it.
Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:20 PM
Thank you, Andrea. I do hope this will do for the theme. Hugs, Sandra
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