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The Flower Girl

The flower girl carefully placed the yellow rose petals Covering the floor before her each step down the aisle Now satisfied and smiling, she looked like an angel There standing awaiting the bride The yellow rose carpet was perfect and perfumed She had performed her job with great pride The bridal march rang, her little heart raced Now here she was coming her way Each step was placed onto petals she'd lain The long beautiful train laying there on the floor Carried the lovely yellow petals away Capturing them as though they were keeping them all For just this one special stroll, to adore The flower girl smiled and dreamed a dream They would re-appear on her wedding day ©Donna Jones

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Bradley Musgrave

Date: 5/29/2013 7:38:00 PM

Very nice, you can easily see/feel the scene.

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 4/23/2013 12:33:00 PM

I loved how you ended this poem. A wonderful sweet image of a precious moment. Nicely done Donna. Warm Smiles, Connie

Donna Jones
Date: 4/23/2013 8:34:00 PM

Appreciate it Connie

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 4/12/2013 11:29:00 AM

great write... Excellent! ~A.O

Donna Jones
Date: 4/12/2013 9:12:00 PM

So appreciated AO...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/4/2013 8:43:00 PM

Pretty and precious!!! A sweet write!

Donna Jones
Date: 4/4/2013 9:28:00 PM

Thanks Andrea....:-)

Heather Ober

Date: 4/4/2013 12:28:00 PM

Absolutely gorgeous! The imagery is stunning, and your portrayal of that little flower girl is so authentic.

Donna Jones
Date: 4/4/2013 2:58:00 PM

Thanks Heather..have been re-working this one a bit today...I think I'm finally finished...glad you liked it...

Jeremy Martin

Date: 4/3/2013 9:23:00 AM

Happy, fragrant and color-rich poem, Donna. Nicely done, favoriting.

Donna Jones
Date: 4/3/2013 12:16:00 PM

Thanks Jeremy...what an honor....Donna

Jack Ellison

Date: 4/1/2013 8:42:00 PM

This is so so sweet my dear Donna! I felt I was there watching this charming little flower girl spreading her yellow roses! Your writing always has a magical quality, dear friend... beautifully composed! Love Jack

Donna Jones
Date: 4/1/2013 9:28:00 PM

Thanks Jack...maybe I should have been a pre-school teacher...instead of bean counter haha...

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/1/2013 5:03:00 PM

This is a wonderful portrait you have painted with the yellow petals. I hope you enter it into the contest, I think it would do very well.

Donna Jones
Date: 4/1/2013 5:27:00 PM

Thanks Richard...I wrote it with the contest in mind but then discovered no free verse allowed! So I changed the title and it's now just a poem.....glad you liked it.

Russell Sivey

Date: 4/1/2013 4:09:00 PM

This is such a sweet write, I wonder if a flower girls actually think things like this? Were you a flower girl Donna? If so, did you dream as this girl in your poem did? I can picture this little dreamer thinking of her own wedding someday! You have written a magnificent and wondrous poem this evening! What a delightful piece, Great Work!!

Donna Jones
Date: 4/1/2013 5:29:00 PM

Thank you Russell...I have never been one but have heard a little girl say something like this at a wedding...she would be the one getting to walk on the flowers...