The Firmament of My Heaven-Ii-W

The work, the words
The worries, the wits
They are lazy today
They have been sleeping too long
In my body
In the broad way of my heart.

I think about you in the heavy traffic
I lay bare my desire
I search the bodies of
A vowel, a consonant, a simile
An oxymoron, a metaphor
To find a two-syllable title
I breathe in their mouths
With the thoughts I have in mind
I whisper into their ears
To hear the echoes of the words
To compose and feel the sound effect
With overflowing ideas in head
I touch the curved lips
To get you mold
Deep in the vault of your mouth
I feel you and hear you.

They’re awake, but lethargic
Spreading the page incoherently
They mean to frustrate me
As they are feeling mean
Dancing in different shapes
Splattered on my page.

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Dr. Ram Mehta

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Based on Surrealism

Eighth place win in :

Contest: Real, UNreal and Surreal sponsored by Debbie Guzzi
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Maverick Avatar
April 24, 2011 at 2:27 PM
Congrats on your win Dr Ram!
Freeman Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 4:35 PM
Way to go Dr Ram, Congratulations on your success in the winner circle. Agape, Moses
Winter Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 3:34 PM
Wow. Absolutely enjoyed this wonderful write. Creative and unique! Warm congrats on your well deserved win, and thank you always for being so kind to me. Most appreciated. Love, shar
Richards Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 3:00 PM
Congratulations, Dr. Ram....on your win, in Debbie's surreal themed contest....a heartful poem this is! And many thanks for your kind comments!
Brown Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 11:39 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Dr. Ram. Love, Carol
Fahey Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 11:09 AM
Congrats, Dr. Ram....great entry! Ellen <3
Horne Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 9:50 AM
Many congrats on your win, Dr Ram : )
Sweetheart Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 7:54 AM
Congr4ats Dr. Ram on your stupendous win in Debbie's contest with this extraordinary entry my friend.. enjoy another well deserved top spot ..luv..
Mannan Avatar
April 21, 2011 at 7:27 AM
Totally enchanting Dr. Ram. Many warm congrats for this terrific write and win.
Sweetheart Avatar
April 19, 2011 at 5:53 AM
Impressive expression of your innermost thoughts Dr. Ram.. excellent entry for the new contest.. I have no ideas for this one just yet... so busy with others right now..good luck ..this is elelgant ...thankxx for your wonderful comments always uplifting to the "Sweetheart"..
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April 19, 2011 at 4:30 AM
This is brilliant Dr Ram ,loved the searching for vowels, metaphors...and two syllable title. getting a feeling of Deja vu, this is what I've been doing lately on my way to work..:)) Good luck with this amazing piece. Regards,Gautami
Dietrich Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 11:58 PM
Dr. Ram, I am very impressed!
Doreus Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 4:54 PM
love it
Soulfire Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 2:38 PM
Dr. Ram, your splattered page is a Jackson Pollock. ~ Soulfire ~
Susan Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 2:03 PM
Congrats on all your wins! Good luck in this contest!
Neels Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 12:55 PM
An awesome one Dr. Ram, loved the route you took with this one. Wishing you all the best for the contest. Thank you for the congratulations on my lifetime membership win ;)
Cooper Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 9:25 AM
This is very beautiful.
Larocca Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 9:22 AM
Lovely poem.
Pickett Avatar
April 18, 2011 at 9:08 AM
Wonderful Doc... This tale sprung from words to create a cinema in my head... Excellent write my friend....:JP]
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