Laura Leiser Poet Rhyme

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For Auroras and Avalanches Contest

Written 2/7/2015

The Final Climb

Strong young man, he looked so fine
Before he took the final climb.
With care, he had prepared
To reach the peak this time.
The day he climbed, it was sublime
Yet, he would leave the earth behind.

And what a day it was, and now the sky
At night, so clear and bright.
He spotted an aurora, grand lights
Fantastic rays, were "out of sight"!
Deep inside he felt higher than a kite.

Then, when on the mount, he took a step
Rumbling ground below, he broke a sweat
Fear and panicked, he fell down and wept
An avalanche or'e took him, falling to his death.

Yet even in this tragedy, how he lived and died
He did what he loved, now his spirit's flying high. 



Written on 2/7/2015

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Anthony Beesley March 31, 2015 at 7:24 PM Gravity never seems to lose its grip

Arlene Binner February 9, 2015 at 7:26 PM Hi Laura, I think you have a REAL talent for writing poetry. Such profound thoughts simply expressed. Arlene Laura Leiser February 18, 2015 at 4:32 PM Thanks so much, Arlene! I appreciate your kind comments, and have truly enjoyed this poetry site! :)

David Fisher February 9, 2015 at 7:12 AM I enjoyed the rhyming of your poem...and that you still had him climbing in spirit showing that hope may be forever. Laura Leiser February 9, 2015 at 12:29 PM Thanks for your kind comments, David. I actually knew two young men, doctor interns, who fell to their deaths years ago on Mt. Shasta. Everyone at the hospital I worked at mourned them, yet they were doing what they loved.

Cynthia Ferguson February 8, 2015 at 7:00 AM working so hard to get to the top and fall, a good reason we should enjoy every moment, even make good of a tear, so if you do fall and leave us, you were doing what you liked :) Laura Leiser February 8, 2015 at 2:15 PM So true, Cynthia. Thanks for taking the time to comment. :)

Emile Pinet February 7, 2015 at 11:11 AM This poem flows well and carries a message aimed at the heart. A beautiful acceptance of death and a belief in a life thereafter. Laura Leiser February 7, 2015 at 11:40 AM Thanks for your kind comments, Emile. Yes, that thought is true!