The Fifth Unwrit

Author's Note: These verses are wrought for a poetess-painter, a fellow poet whose sorrow kindled their first ember; may this little flame, in time, find its way unto her.


—A Quatrain Beneath Eternity— Upon one leaf, where gravity dreamed slow, a rain-born orb did tremble under heaven; her argent quiver made the star-fires flow, and dawn stood hushed beneath the empyrean; an ant climbed forth from bark's primeval shrine, then paused before her—dark against divine. He drew towards her as the firmament bent its vast curvature about her sphere; as though some adamantine gravitation sent a wandering world where worlds should disappear; he touched her light—and through his six limbs ran a shudder older than the breath of man. He deemed her painter, fashioned out of rain, with leaf for canvas, sunlight for her dye; she bore the green world's secret in her vein, and whole lost heavens trembled in her eye; their minute orbits crossed beneath the tree— two infinitudes made briefly one decree. Then he ascended towards the ancient bough, she followed that inexorable green descent; no wound accused the other of the why, nor did their parting bear resentment; and time, beyond the jurisdiction of years, let Earth spend eleven seasons unawares. He came again. The old light knew his tread; she had not ceased her pilgrimage through green; no reckoning rose between the living and dead, nor any blade of old remembrance keen; one quill returned above the waiting page— four living lines outshone an earthly age. Then came the storm. The leaf became a sea; the firmament was riven from its throne; the wind took him beyond all astronomy, past every star by which the lost are known; she quaked, and all her little heavens broke— yet waited for the word he never spoke. Perhaps he bore one universe to tell; perhaps her own lay folded in the deep; perhaps the storm extinguished one farewell before its syllables had learned to sleep; she moves still downward through the shaken green— and somewhere, the fifth line remains unseen.
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August 31, 2026 at 9:17 AM
Wow, this really made me teary-eyed and left my heart in pieces, quite a breathtakingly poignant poem and woah, I see this is a dedication to Lin.. she is truly a beautiful soul and it's truly lovely to see her emotions being layered with such gentleness and empathy here ~ and dear Mohit, how incredibly kind and thoughtful of you it is to have inked this heartfelt piece .. the melancholy that you've painted throughout and the imagery of the leaf ~ sighh.. everything touched my soul. Absolutely a wonderful write... Sending you light, best wishes and blessings ~ ⭐ ⭐ 💫 💫 🌙
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August 31, 2026 at 10:25 AM
Dear Hiya, Thy gracious words touch me deeply, and I thank thee for receiving these poor verses with such tenderness. What moves me strangely is that this little poem did not feel wholly written by me; it seemed to arrive—quietly, almost as though some unseen hand had placed it upon my page. Perhaps those who think in verses are bound by some strange covenant beyond the jurisdiction of logic; certain things simply descend upon the mind, demanding to be spoken before reason can ask from whence they came. I am grateful that thou didst meet its little flame with such warmth. Perhaps the poem arrived where it was meant to arrive. Stay blest evermore, dear Hiya. 🌸✨
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August 30, 2026 at 2:13 AM
Both beautiful and profound, Mohit. Your talent never ceases to amaze me
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August 30, 2026 at 6:46 AM
Dear Andrea, thy gracious words touch me deeply, and I thank thee for receiving these humble lines with such kindness. Though I am not the wearer of that shoe, some pains arrive without asking whose feet they find; and so, in some small measure, hers reached me too. My quill, under its old and wayward habit, bled upon the page. I only wished that the heart enduring such grief may yet find reasons enough to stand strong—and, in time, to be joyous again. 🕊️
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August 30, 2026 at 1:16 AM
This is a beautifully crafted piece. The way you elevate the microscopic interaction between an ant and a rain-born orb into a profound cosmic event is truly breathtaking. Your consistent rhythm and rhyming sestets anchor the sweeping, surreal imagery perfectly, making the unresolved nature of that "fifth line" all the more poignant. It is a brilliant and deeply moving exploration of bereavement and the vastness contained within fleeting moments.
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August 30, 2026 at 6:50 AM
Cherished Alison, thy generous and perceptive reading means much to me; thank thee for meeting the poem so attentively. I was not the wearer of the grief I wrote beside, yet some sorrows cross their appointed borders and touch even the witness. My quill, perhaps by its old unruly instinct, bled a little beneath that touch. I am simply glad that the small world of leaf, rain, and ant could carry something larger than itself—and that thou didst hear it. 🌸✨
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August 29, 2026 at 8:59 AM
Mohit, I have read your verses twice and cried with heartbroken emotion over the last two. You have so beautifully captured my grief in your unique artistic style. I fear your excellent creation will not be read by many and understood by less, but my heart felt the depth of your compassion very deeply. What a beautiful use of imagery to use a leaf and an ant. There was no shelter from the storm, but the rain understood and camouflaged my tears. I am honored and grateful that you composed these lines with such benevolent sensitivity. I have marked it as a favorite... how could I not?🌹⭐❤️
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August 29, 2026 at 9:54 AM
Dear Lin, 🌸"These poor-wrought lines have found their truest end in thee, for once thine eyes have read, their pilgrimage is done; thy heart hath felt what ink could scarcely make or see, and thus their little flame hath met its destined sun; for verse is not fulfilled by praise, nor by the page— but when one wounded heart receives its offered homage."🌸 And from my little store of gladness, I send thee thy rightful share. ✨
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August 29, 2026 at 8:35 AM
Linnersz is a brilliant poetess and painter. She does it all from her heart and soul, and that is why her work is deeply felt, for its authenticity and sincerity. She loves and cares for those in her life with that same sincerity, which is something I truly appreciate. Dear Mohit, kind soul, this is such a thoughtful gesture, and so very empathetic and compassionate of you to do. It’s not an easy time for her as she is grieving. The least we could do is lift her up in any way we can. Fave! Sending you light always
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August 29, 2026 at 9:46 AM
Thy generous words lend these humble verses a light they could not kindle alone. If poetry may lift one grieving soul, then even its smallest utterance has not been wrought in vain. I thank thee, most sincerely, for such gracious witness, IE. Stay blest evermore!
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